Ode to ephemeral

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Ode to ephemeral

Postby shokin » Thu May 14, 2009 6:33 pm

Ode to ephemeral



Because I love music
They offer me cd's,
That I won't listen
If I am alone.

Because I love music
They offer me mp3,
That I won't listen
In the street.

Because I love music
I got a violin,
That I won't train
For an employer.

Stock of mp3 ?
Stock of cd's ?
Stock of know-how ?
All this is stock !

And stocks make us worried :
Don't bring money,
Don't bring honey,
Bring only greed.

That's why I prefer
Shows than mp3
Cinema than dvd's.
Memory than photos.



Now you can better understand why I spend less time on FaceBook ! :lol:



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Re: Ode to ephemeral

Postby sweets » Sat May 16, 2009 1:47 pm

hellllllllllllllo
iagree with you that old things have different falvore than nowadays

things now are out of feelings as i think

so
:-D That's why I prefer
Shows than mp3
Cinema than dvd's.
Memory than photos.

cu
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Re: Ode to ephemeral

Postby shakespear » Sun May 17, 2009 8:50 am

hi friend
i think u have good idea but the poem needs arrangement .
you blamed me for using chat language in my letter but u used abbreviation in your poem and this is not acceptable ad your point of view, don't agree with me???
gd luck and c u
our life is like a night mare

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Re: Ode to ephemeral

Postby Psixochka » Sun May 17, 2009 1:15 pm

Hi :-)

Nice work, especially these words:
That's why I prefer
Shows than mp3
Cinema than dvd's.
Memory than photos.


I think that money nowadays is one of the most dreadfull evil...
Scio me nihil scire. (Latin)
I know, that I know nothing. (By Socrates)

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Re: Ode to ephemeral

Postby shokin » Sun May 17, 2009 6:27 pm

shakespear wrote:hi friend
i think u have good idea but the poem needs arrangement .
you blamed me for using chat language in my letter but u used abbreviation in your poem and this is not acceptable ad your point of view, don't agree with me???
gd luck and c u


Okay ! my poem is a bit sosolala ! = I didn't expect many congratulations. :mrgreen:

Psixochka wrote:I think that money nowadays is one of the most dreadfull evil...


Yes, but... I focused on a more dreadfull evil : the materialism when this one is bad for nature health :

What will we do with mp3 and discs ? Why do we get it ? stock, stock, stock holmes, Sherlock Holmes !!! what will nature do with all this ? Moreover all these things overcharged our unconsciousness : we are afraid to lose mp3, to lose discs. Where is the time when we accepted to lose things, to hear a song only once but deeply ? Where are the years when we were not telling ourselves "I have to know everything ! I must listen to Imagine of John Lennon because everybody tells me to listen to it !"



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Nous sommes libres. Wir sind frei. We are free. Somos libres. Siamo liberi.


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