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Eyes-language

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To the lovely foreign dumb woman

Eyes-language

Don`t veil your eyes
They are the loveliest part you have
They are the windows of your spirit
And through them I can travel inside you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me swim in your spring
* * *
Your eyes are fathomless
But I can probe them
You are always silent
But through your eyes
I can understand you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me fly in your sky

* * *
You look at me and I look at you
You understand me and I understand you
You move your lips hoping to speak
And I fidget in my seat hoping
to hear your voice
And even if you speak
I can`t understand you
We have different tongues
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me die in your lap
* * *
our life is like a night mare
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hi shakespear

againe same sad missing tone in ur poem i know that u know that life is mixture between pain and passion but we always look to positive side of life so try and look at iam sure that u need time to see

in general i like ur poem cuz this time is about eyes language and i know how meanings it carry

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hi sweet
ur words is better than my poem
c u later
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thanks my friend for ur poem ..
nice words , really i like it
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hi loola
u r very kind and ur words encourage me and i think every one needs to be encouraged from time to time
thnx again
good luck and bye
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hi my friend
thnx very much 4 these words and i hope we meet again in future
thnx agsin and c u later
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hi everyone and goodluck
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is it a real story or imagination?
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hey friend, i noticed this poem it has a deep meaning without doubting, not only that also i observed you can express more than thus Coz you have ability to do it , in general you are good and i like it.
in finally i wish to you develop your ability and be a famous poet
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hi my friend Mohyiedine
really u encouragedme and i hope u explain my faults and weak lines koz i`m in need to know the weakness of my lines
plz i`m waiting ur comments and plz speak frankly!
where r u from???
c u soon and gd luck
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hi shakespear, in the first i haven't meant you have the weak lines, Bt i wanted to give you my opinion of that poem, that sujet which you expressed about your writing has a deep essense for that , i told you, you can write or express more than thus.
one thing i liked in your writing that's you can play with words without any difficults, not only that also you can give the poem an aesthetic sight....
as for your question that's where am i from , im from Morocco, do you know it
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hi
yes i know ur country koz i`m iraqi and i like people of moroco and thnx 4 ur comment and i hope to meet u much
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waw shakespear u write a wonderful , yes eyes is a window of our body , we can see inner and find all things that some one want hide us !
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hi
thnx justme
ur name is like a start of a poem
have lovely times
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hi
expressing poem and has good idea
hhhhhhhhhhhhhh
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thnx really u r kind
thnx again
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shakespear wrote:To the lovely foreign dumb woman

Eyes-language

Don`t veil your eyes
They are the loveliest part you have
They are the windows of your spirit
And through them I can travel inside you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me swim in your spring
* * *
Your eyes are fathomless
But I can probe them
You are always silent
But through your eyes
I can understand you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me fly in your sky

* * *
You look at me and I look at you
You understand me and I understand you
You move your lips hoping to speak
And I fidget in my seat hoping
to hear your voice
And even if you speak
I can`t understand you
We have different tongues
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me die in your lap
* * *
show me ur comment plz
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"the eyes are the mirror of the soul" i like this phrase taken from the Bible; look at this quote: "Your eye is the lamp of your body. When your eyes are good, your whole body also is full of light. But when they are bad, your body also is full of darkness" Luke 11:34 from Bible
i lked it :)
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hi lara and thnx 4 ur comment
really i didn't read the bible , i'm moslem and i didn't take care of bible till u told me that u found this term in this holy book...
thanx 4 u making me know that
my best wishes
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GREAT GREAT GREAT :-D :-D :-D
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farah wrote:GREAT GREAT GREAT :-D :-D :-D
thanks a lot
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shakespear wrote:To the lovely foreign dumb woman

Eyes-language

Don`t veil your eyes
They are the loveliest part you have
They are the windows of your spirit
And through them I can travel inside you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me swim in your spring
* * *
Your eyes are fathomless
But I can probe them
You are always silent
But through your eyes
I can understand you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me fly in your sky

* * *
You look at me and I look at you
You understand me and I understand you
You move your lips hoping to speak
And I fidget in my seat hoping
to hear your voice
And even if you speak
I can`t understand you
We have different tongues
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me die in your lap
* * *
i like this poem so much...it's true not imagination
our life is like a night mare
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