why u have to say goodbye

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why u have to say goodbye

Postby nada » Tue Jul 21, 2009 8:38 am

:cry: Why u have to say goodbye
Don't go baby without you I cannot imagine my life
Honey don't die your shock will cut my heart deep inside like a knife
Are you really gone?
Don't leave me I don't wanna be alone
I wanna wake up from this nightmare
I wanna have you back to everything we share

I can remember when you said:
(There are a lot of beautiful things in this world but they are not as your beauty)
This is too much for me baby and I can't believe this reality
Are you really gone?
Don't leave me I don't wanna be alone

All I see is a body but where is the soul
I wanna have you back baby I wanna those days I wanna have it all



Don't go baby without you I cannot imagine my life
Honey don't die your shock will cut my heart deep inside like a knife

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Re: why u have to say goodbye

Postby Vega » Wed Jul 22, 2009 9:36 am

Is it a poem or Rap? I ask because there are many "wanna/gonna" there.

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Re: why u have to say goodbye

Postby nada » Wed Jul 22, 2009 11:38 am

i wrote it as a poem actualy
but someone told me that it seems like a song to him more than a poem

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Re: why u have to say goodbye

Postby shakespear » Wed Jul 29, 2009 12:19 pm

hello
i think the poem is good although the structure is not very good any way it has good idea and the exression is high
go ahead and gd luck
our life is like a night mare


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