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strange sonnet
Strange sonnet
Don't depart O dear! Days are delightful dreams.
Let's live lovely life, lick lips lustfully.
Buy beauty beside bliss, buy big bright beams.
Sing so soft songs, "Siren" start songs slightly.
* * *
You're yap yearn to yoke, years yarn the yellow
Hey hobo here! Have ye heeded hind?
Fight foes for freedom, fall down for fellow.
Can't you come closely? Can't you keep kind?
* * *
My mass's much, Magian maid made me mad.
Tiny titmouse touched torn temper timely.
Save sick single, sinking in sins, still sad.
Rude rook raped roe, rain ran round road roughly.
Can you guess my poem either good or bad?
Don't be shy please! And show your opinion frankly.
Don't depart O dear! Days are delightful dreams.
Let's live lovely life, lick lips lustfully.
Buy beauty beside bliss, buy big bright beams.
Sing so soft songs, "Siren" start songs slightly.
* * *
You're yap yearn to yoke, years yarn the yellow
Hey hobo here! Have ye heeded hind?
Fight foes for freedom, fall down for fellow.
Can't you come closely? Can't you keep kind?
* * *
My mass's much, Magian maid made me mad.
Tiny titmouse touched torn temper timely.
Save sick single, sinking in sins, still sad.
Rude rook raped roe, rain ran round road roughly.
Can you guess my poem either good or bad?
Don't be shy please! And show your opinion frankly.
our life is like a night mare
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Re: strange sonnet
so strange that i can not comment on
really i have no idea or word to say
really i have no idea or word to say
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Re: strange sonnet
hi
thnx to be the 1st as i thought
plz say anything just comment and don`t be shy
did u discover the construction of lines that they begins with same sounds
c u
thnx to be the 1st as i thought
plz say anything just comment and don`t be shy
did u discover the construction of lines that they begins with same sounds
c u
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Re: strange sonnet
i read the sonnet manytime but in vain i did not get anything
maybe i have to read it when i wakeup
cu
maybe i have to read it when i wakeup
cu
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Re: strange sonnet
hello
read it plz and discover that all the lines begin with the same sounds
c u and thnx
read it plz and discover that all the lines begin with the same sounds
c u and thnx
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Re: strange sonnet
wellllllllllllllllllllll
in notice sounds but iam looking for different thing i donot know what it is
in notice sounds but iam looking for different thing i donot know what it is
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Re: strange sonnet
Hi!
This is strange poem... I didn't get it, but I noticed sounds... And I don't know what to comment on....
Maybe you hint us what your poem is about?
This is strange poem... I didn't get it, but I noticed sounds... And I don't know what to comment on....
Maybe you hint us what your poem is about?
Scio me nihil scire. (Latin)
I know, that I know nothing. (By Socrates)
I know, that I know nothing. (By Socrates)
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Re: strange sonnet
hello
i made it trying to begin the lines with the same sound so one can see that
thnx 4 ur comments
c u and gd luck
i made it trying to begin the lines with the same sound so one can see that
thnx 4 ur comments
c u and gd luck
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Re: strange sonnet
Goodevening
And fianlly i get why i didn't understand it
first i miss the tone that i used to you have unique structure which i miss it this time
second you fouce on sounds it's so over react i did not enjoy with ,i belive that mession of poem is to express your ideas in a way help other to react with you .
sorry for those harsh comments but this is my feelings towards ur poem
cu
And fianlly i get why i didn't understand it
first i miss the tone that i used to you have unique structure which i miss it this time
second you fouce on sounds it's so over react i did not enjoy with ,i belive that mession of poem is to express your ideas in a way help other to react with you .
sorry for those harsh comments but this is my feelings towards ur poem
cu
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Re: strange sonnet
hi
don't be sorry koz its ur point of view and i respect it and i thnk u r werite koz when we focus on tone we sometimes lose the important thing i.e the idea , the spirit of the poem and the poem will be weak.
really in this poem , as u said , i wanna try something else, new and treating with sounds and tone.
thnx and i wanna u open ur inbox
c u and gd luck
don't be sorry koz its ur point of view and i respect it and i thnk u r werite koz when we focus on tone we sometimes lose the important thing i.e the idea , the spirit of the poem and the poem will be weak.
really in this poem , as u said , i wanna try something else, new and treating with sounds and tone.
thnx and i wanna u open ur inbox
c u and gd luck
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Re: strange sonnet
Excellent.shakespear wrote:Fight foes for freedom, fall down for fellow.
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Re: strange sonnet
hello
thnx and u r welcome my loyal fried.
good luck.
thnx and u r welcome my loyal fried.
good luck.
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Re: strange sonnet
really it is strange sonnet
difficult
see you
kisses
difficult
see you
kisses
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Re: strange sonnet
hi
the poem seem very difficult how u made it.
can i learn how to write poems?
thnx
the poem seem very difficult how u made it.
can i learn how to write poems?
thnx
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Re: strange sonnet
hello every body
i don't know how to make it but the words come to me when i have an idea or a certain feeling
thnx
have nice day
i don't know how to make it but the words come to me when i have an idea or a certain feeling
thnx
have nice day
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Re: strange sonnet
hi
can u help me? if u don't like to help me so it is ok.
thanx
can u help me? if u don't like to help me so it is ok.
thanx
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Re: strange sonnet
hola
yes with pleasure
i'll be happy to help u
r u beautiful?
c u
yes with pleasure
i'll be happy to help u
r u beautiful?
c u
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Re: strange sonnet
Rich "sound" content
alliterations, consonances, assonances
it's an interesting piece of poem
But the last couplet somehow destroys the continuity and congruity
alliterations, consonances, assonances
it's an interesting piece of poem
But the last couplet somehow destroys the continuity and congruity
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Re: strange sonnet
hello
i think u r right but i intended to do that and i was able to do alliteration
thnx 4 this comment and really u seem expert in literature
c u and have gd luck
i think u r right but i intended to do that and i was able to do alliteration
thnx 4 this comment and really u seem expert in literature
c u and have gd luck
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Re: strange sonnet
Hi I aske sweet about u and her but she didn't answer me and I think u can answer me please r u in love with her.? I am sorry about this question but I want to know I am not envy her .i shall wait for the answer .bye
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Re: strange sonnet
Hi I think its not ur affair in addition I'm here to hear comment on my poem not to hear that and I wish she loves me koz she is very education and has high spirit so if she loves me I'll swim in the sea at night in the winter and account the sand of the shore and drops of rains and leaves of trees so don't ask me about that again plz …..
thnx
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good responsshakespear wrote:Hi I think its not ur affair in addition I'm here to hear comment on my poem not to hear that and I wish she loves me koz she is very education and has high spirit so if she loves me I'll swim in the sea at night in the winter and account the sand of the shore and drops of rains and leaves of trees so don't ask me about that again plz …..
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Re: strange sonnet
sonnet (noun): a poem of fourteen lines using any of a number of formal rhyme schemes, in English typically having ten syllables per line
Well, it's 14 lines ok. And most have 10 syllables.
Well, it's 14 lines ok. And most have 10 syllables.
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Re: strange sonnet
hello
thnx palyer 4 this msg but u did n't value my poem so plz send me ur comment about the poem
best wihes friend
thnx palyer 4 this msg but u did n't value my poem so plz send me ur comment about the poem
best wihes friend
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Re: strange sonnet
I think it's a very clever strange sonnet.
But if you intend it to be a sonnet - typically with 14 lines and typically 10 syllables per line (which seems to be what you do intend) - then I think you should try to fix the lines that don't have 10 syllables.
Just my humble opinion, since you ask me to value your sonnet
But if you intend it to be a sonnet - typically with 14 lines and typically 10 syllables per line (which seems to be what you do intend) - then I think you should try to fix the lines that don't have 10 syllables.
Just my humble opinion, since you ask me to value your sonnet
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Re: strange sonnet
hello
its typical as u said , the poem contains 14 linesand every line has 10 syllables .it is ab ab cd cd ef ef gg so plz show me what have i to do?
really u seem very good in poetry and i like to make use of ur information.
c u bye
its typical as u said , the poem contains 14 linesand every line has 10 syllables .it is ab ab cd cd ef ef gg so plz show me what have i to do?
really u seem very good in poetry and i like to make use of ur information.
c u bye
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hello lovely friends
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hello player
really i like to contact u and know from u something about poetry so plz let's meet
thanks and have nice moments
really i like to contact u and know from u something about poetry so plz let's meet
thanks and have nice moments
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Re: strange sonnet
it's a tongue twister :D
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Re: strange sonnet
it has meaning beside the tongue twister...ok
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Re: strange sonnet
Shakes this poem i need to read it again and again to got well its meaning
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Re: strange sonnet
hi
its hard to be pronounced
its hard to be pronounced
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Re: strange sonnet
I THINK IT'S NOT VERY GOODshakespear wrote:Strange sonnet
Don't depart O dear! Days are delightful dreams.
Let's live lovely life, lick lips lustfully.
Buy beauty beside bliss, buy big bright beams.
Sing so soft songs, "Siren" start songs slightly.
* * *
You're yap yearn to yoke, years yarn the yellow
Hey hobo here! Have ye heeded hind?
Fight foes for freedom, fall down for fellow.
Can't you come closely? Can't you keep kind?
* * *
My mass's much, Magian maid made me mad.
Tiny titmouse touched torn temper timely.
Save sick single, sinking in sins, still sad.
Rude rook raped roe, rain ran round road roughly.
Can you guess my poem either good or bad?
Don't be shy please! And show your opinion frankly.
ANY WAY, IT'S MY WORK
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