A poem of me, which sounds differently from my preceeding ones.
And then they die
And they meet each other,
And they say each to other,
- Not today...
- Just today...
And the next night is right,
And the next light might fight,
- Just a fast sight...
- Just a last sight...
And the next day they play,
And the next day they say,
- Just two days...
- Just two days...
And then they live together,
And then they say each to other,
- Just too...
- Too just...
Shokin
And then they die
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And then they die
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Re: And then they die
Good job!
If you don't mind, let me amend something:
If you don't mind, let me amend something:
shokin wrote:A poem of mine (me ), which sounds differently from my preceeding ones.
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Re: And then they die
Thanks for the correction ! Now I can see another difference between english and french.
I don't mind. I do mind if you don't correct me.
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Re: And then they die
i do not know what to say i like it and dislike it sametime
u depend on sound too much remindind me with 18th poets if u remember them
u depend on sound too much remindind me with 18th poets if u remember them
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