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Ode from inside a jail

Post by shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:33 am

Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?” ……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Post by shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:37 am

shakespear wrote:Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?”

……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Post by sweets » Wed Aug 18, 2010 7:20 pm

hi

frankly i do not know wht to write it's like a story i read it and imagen it sametime imagen how passion and love help heroin the poem to pass time and not to forget her

ur great man

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Post by shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 9:44 pm

hello
ok u r the first to comment my poem and i think did not like it much koz u didn't appreciate it, u didn't say if its good or bad . but as u said it is like story , indeed its a story happened inside a jail. a story of one loves and dreams to meet his sweetheart again.
thnx 4 ur comment
gd lk

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Post by farah » Fri Aug 20, 2010 7:46 am

shakespear wrote:Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?” ……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time


YOU ARE FANTASTIC

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Post by sweets » Fri Aug 20, 2010 8:47 pm

shakespear wrote:hello
ok u r the first to comment my poem and i think did not like it much koz u didn't appreciate it, u didn't say if its good or bad . but as u said it is like story , indeed its a story happened inside a jail. a story of one loves and dreams to meet his sweetheart again.
thnx 4 ur comment
gd lk
my dear freind
i did not say it's bad one i like it
i still loosing my talent i do not know wht's up if u ave any advices plz send some

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Post by msaabneh » Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:40 am

oh my god!!! did you write this?

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Post by msaabneh » Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:59 am

i am an English literature graduate. yet, i thought this poem belongs to Shakespeare. plz mention your real name here. its a crime for a person like you to be nameless. i want to put it on my Facebook page, so i wouldn't put it without your name.

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Post by RoseRed » Mon Aug 30, 2010 6:32 pm

Nice poem, i liked it, sorry i'm busy these days! u are nice poetman! kisses

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Post by shakespear » Mon Aug 30, 2010 6:52 pm

thanks 4 those who show comments
any one wants to write it on facebook its ok
my name is darkstar
thnx again 4 ur comments
gd lk
c u

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Post by farah » Sat Sep 04, 2010 5:14 am

Hi
I didn't see this poem on facebook yet. Please tell me when you put it in facebook.
:mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen:

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Post by shakespear » Mon Sep 06, 2010 11:08 am

hello
i do'nt know when he'll put it on fb
u can ask him
his name is msaabneh
c u

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Post by fanuun » Tue Sep 14, 2010 9:37 am

NICE FLOW. YOU ARE REALLY GOOD.

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Post by shakespear » Wed Sep 15, 2010 8:10 pm

thanks fanuun
i'd like to hear comment and i wish u pick up mistakes from my poem that i think u will give me expensive gift.
thnx again and accept my regards
c u and gd lk

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Post by farah » Sun Sep 19, 2010 6:27 pm

hi
I miss you all
Any new poem?
see you
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Post by shakespear » Sun Sep 19, 2010 7:33 pm

hello
really no new poems yet
may be in next few days, i don't know ...
poet needs inspiration
thnx 4 ur comment
c u

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Post by farah » Tue Sep 28, 2010 6:49 pm

Hi
I shall send you my picture to give you inspiration please write a poem on me
Thanks
Best wishes {-: {-: {-:

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Post by shakespear » Thu Sep 30, 2010 5:17 pm

inspiration isn't given by photos only it's given by chatting and feelings
now u know that? i hope u got it
any way i'll be glad to get ur photo, it's my pleasure to c ur face and figure....
c u

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Post by farah » Wed Oct 13, 2010 3:49 pm

Hello
Please can you write a poem about me?
I send messege to you please read it and answer me.
I will wait to read the answer.
Bye

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Post by Aimee » Thu Oct 14, 2010 5:46 am

Really a heart touching poem friend. Noticing the word jail i first hesitated to read this poem. but now i feel happy that I read this. Superb!!!!!

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Post by shakespear » Sat Oct 16, 2010 5:37 pm

hello
thnx ur words really encourage persons to write more and more
thnx again
plz make me favor and always show me ur comments
c u and have lovely moments

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Post by shakespear » Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:34 pm

hello
this poem reminds me the days in the jail, although they were hateful days but they will stay in mind and won't disappear and i can't forget them. there is always sth which reminds u that.
i wanna just express my feelings.
forgive me

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Post by farah » Sun Feb 13, 2011 12:47 pm

REALLY U WAS IN THE JAIL
OHHHHHHH
U WAS SUFFERING IF U WAS IN THE JAIL

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Post by shakespear » Tue Feb 15, 2011 4:37 pm

yes i was in it and i suffered from that and i'm still suffering
god save me and all my friends

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Post by manal » Thu Feb 17, 2011 7:17 pm

woooooooooo,
i thought i read all of ur poems,but i missed this,
how great u r,u convey me in a moment from world to another,thanx.

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Post by shakespear » Sun Feb 20, 2011 7:44 pm

hello
u r welcome and i thnx u 4 these comments , u seem so kind and soft. really i wish u read all my poems and send me ur point of view about my writings. we all learn and learn and one can't stop learing koz that refers to stopping the life and means death....
plz read and send me ur comments
c u

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Post by manal » Mon Feb 21, 2011 5:46 am

u r welcome,
there is a saying that "the great person is great untill s/he thinks s/he is great",
one has to learn to the last moment of his/her life,u r right,thnx :-D

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Post by shakespear » Mon Feb 21, 2011 11:30 am

hello
yes u r the person is so great unless that person claims the knowledge, in that moment s/he becomes ignorant and no more educated, koz s/he will stop searching and learning.
really i thought u r so educated and i invite u to try writing poems or short storied koz i think u can
thnx and hope lovely times

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Post by manal » Mon Feb 21, 2011 1:42 pm

u get the idea,
i thank ur invitation very much ,in fact u r motivating me,thanx.
i like writing poems and stories,but it depends on my mood {-;
i will try to have something new very soon ,and u of course will be the supervisor of me {-;
thanx again for regarding me as an educated person,it means a lot for me,that shakespear says so.

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Post by shakespear » Mon Feb 21, 2011 3:45 pm

u r welcome and i'll be so happy to be ur helper in writing sth, just start any thing and u'll find urself making something great ...u'll find ur self making great work and u'll be proud of that..i'm sure u can but first put the idea infront of ur face and hold the pen and write what is inside ur deeps then ur pen won't stop .......thnx, u inspired me 2 say these lovely words and advices..
good luck

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Post by manal » Mon Feb 21, 2011 6:15 pm

hi,
i promise that u will read a new thing by me as soon as possible,and thank u for every thing.
have nice moments.

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Post by shakespear » Tue Feb 22, 2011 7:34 pm

hello
i tried to write but i can't , i know that i have something to write about but i can't now ...y??????? i don't know y ? may be its koz of not holding the pen. poems inside our souls are like volvano, u can't excite it unless magma and melted things inside it boil, in that time the volcano excite and its magma will flow , our soul is like the volcano and the poems are like this magma so we have not to oblige our selves to write a poem.
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Post by farah » Wed Feb 23, 2011 6:01 pm

Hellooooooooo
i read this comment in your new subject with some changs but i think it is good
good luck

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Post by shakespear » Sat Feb 26, 2011 3:17 pm

hello
yes that's right i issued it in separate topic.thnx 4 this soft comment and have nice moments

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Post by farah » Mon Feb 28, 2011 4:25 pm

HELLO
I WANT TO WRITE SOMETHING BUT I CANNOT PLEASE CAN U HELP ME IN WTITING A POEM?
MY REGARDS AND PLEASE READ MY LETTER IN YOUR BOX IN ENGLISH CLUB AND ANSWER ME.
THANKS

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Post by shakespear » Wed May 11, 2011 7:53 am

hi
listen
poems can't be written by friends and by helping one another, i know one can help another by encoruging but to teach him how to write a poem , really i don't know
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Post by xtragirl » Thu May 12, 2011 11:49 am

Hmm.. My comment for now, it's so good and touch my heart..
You know, I feel that I'm in that jail..
Imagine for what I will do..
So far with someone I love..
So sad..

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Post by shakespear » Sat May 14, 2011 6:26 am

hello
thnx .......
really u encouraged me with these lovley words and i hope u send more comments about other poems.......
u seem so good in this comment and i hope u try to write poems or any literatur writing
c u
my best wishes

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Post by Lara » Mon Aug 01, 2011 3:06 pm

hi :) Shakespear, i already told u i loved this poem. I hope you do not miss this great gift that you have to write poems, and God continue giving you lots of inspiration. Bye

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Post by shakespear » Fri Aug 05, 2011 7:08 am

hi lara and thnx
so am i
hope not to lose this gift of God...pray 4 me to get inspiration
thanx again

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Post by shakespear » Tue Jun 11, 2013 12:51 pm

hi all my friends....some thing reminds me this poem...really i like it much....koz its part of my personality...
have lovely time...
c u
our life is like a night mare

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Post by Elisa » Thu Jun 13, 2013 4:02 pm

Have you been in a jail?

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Post by shakespear » Fri Jun 14, 2013 2:01 pm

hi elisa...yeah i entered the jail for about 11 months then i was released , but after that i felt the jail come inside me.....i think u got the meaning....i meant i'm scared now and i fear my shadow...
any way..its now just memory...
our life is like a night mare

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Post by Elisa » Fri Jun 14, 2013 4:34 pm

I am so sorry for you. Fear is a bad beast!

Ciao.

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Post by shakespear » Fri Jun 14, 2013 9:04 pm

thnx 4 ur soft feelings...really i used to fear every thing ...in the street, in the flat, in the scholl, even the bed...its frightful ...some times i awake from sleep and turn my pillow to discover there's nothing...it's tragedy....

where are all my loyal friends...the place seem empty...
why did that happened to this club??
have nice moments
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Post by Elisa » Sat Jun 15, 2013 8:40 am

Rich people use psychotherapy, other people use religion...I prefer a bar of good chocolate :)

But ..tell me...What do you think there could be under the pillow?

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Post by shakespear » Sat Jun 15, 2013 4:13 pm

hi again/

as u said everyone uses sth different to cure self...may b one of us wana escape to uncertain place just to forget the problem....some use religion to dive in worshipping and adoration, to get patience for facing that problem...for me i preter the last one...i mean worshipping...

in that time, i just had got out from my nightmare and i dont know now why i refuged that time to the place under my pillow....may be i was afraid of sth..a bomb or snake or a ghost or some thing else....may be i wanted to become armed against any probable danger so i turned my pollow looking for a gun or a knife or any weapon perhaps i might find there....

these are my thoughts ...may be i'm wrong and i've 2 face my problems once and twice..more and more....till i used to live peacefully....
any way thanks 4 ur interest and hope u nice time....
have nice moments u and all my friends...
good luck
our life is like a night mare

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Post by Elisa » Sat Jun 15, 2013 4:49 pm

I am sorry, you seem so sad.

How can I help you... maybe telling you that under your pillow you can find only your pyjama or some money that the tooth fairy left for you... but probably this cannot cheer you up.

I wish you all the best, ciao.

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Post by shakespear » Sat Jun 15, 2013 7:03 pm

hahahahah.......thnx ...really u seem so funny...ok real friend who wants to give happines to his/her friends
at least u could make me laugh..
thnx again
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Post by shakespear » Thu Jan 07, 2016 5:34 pm

ode from inside a jail....i like this poem...and some other poems i wrote b4
our life is like a night mare

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Post by shakespear » Fri Sep 15, 2017 8:54 am

RENEW OLD POEMS
our life is like a night mare

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