Ode from inside a jail

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Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:33 am

Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?” ……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:37 am

shakespear wrote:Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?”

……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby sweets » Wed Aug 18, 2010 7:20 pm

hi

frankly i do not know wht to write it's like a story i read it and imagen it sametime imagen how passion and love help heroin the poem to pass time and not to forget her

ur great man

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 9:44 pm

hello
ok u r the first to comment my poem and i think did not like it much koz u didn't appreciate it, u didn't say if its good or bad . but as u said it is like story , indeed its a story happened inside a jail. a story of one loves and dreams to meet his sweetheart again.
thnx 4 ur comment
gd lk

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby farah » Fri Aug 20, 2010 7:46 am

shakespear wrote:Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?” ……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time




YOU ARE FANTASTIC

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby sweets » Fri Aug 20, 2010 8:47 pm

shakespear wrote:hello
ok u r the first to comment my poem and i think did not like it much koz u didn't appreciate it, u didn't say if its good or bad . but as u said it is like story , indeed its a story happened inside a jail. a story of one loves and dreams to meet his sweetheart again.
thnx 4 ur comment
gd lk


my dear freind
i did not say it's bad one i like it
i still loosing my talent i do not know wht's up if u ave any advices plz send some

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby msaabneh » Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:40 am

oh my god!!! did you write this?

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby msaabneh » Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:59 am

i am an English literature graduate. yet, i thought this poem belongs to Shakespeare. plz mention your real name here. its a crime for a person like you to be nameless. i want to put it on my Facebook page, so i wouldn't put it without your name.

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby RoseRed » Mon Aug 30, 2010 6:32 pm

Nice poem, i liked it, sorry i'm busy these days! u are nice poetman! kisses

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Mon Aug 30, 2010 6:52 pm

thanks 4 those who show comments
any one wants to write it on facebook its ok
my name is darkstar
thnx again 4 ur comments
gd lk
c u

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby farah » Sat Sep 04, 2010 5:14 am

Hi
I didn't see this poem on facebook yet. Please tell me when you put it in facebook.
:mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen:

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Mon Sep 06, 2010 11:08 am

hello
i do'nt know when he'll put it on fb
u can ask him
his name is msaabneh
c u

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby fanuun » Tue Sep 14, 2010 9:37 am

NICE FLOW. YOU ARE REALLY GOOD.

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Wed Sep 15, 2010 8:10 pm

thanks fanuun
i'd like to hear comment and i wish u pick up mistakes from my poem that i think u will give me expensive gift.
thnx again and accept my regards
c u and gd lk

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby farah » Sun Sep 19, 2010 6:27 pm

hi
I miss you all
Any new poem?
see you
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Sun Sep 19, 2010 7:33 pm

hello
really no new poems yet
may be in next few days, i don't know ...
poet needs inspiration
thnx 4 ur comment
c u

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby farah » Tue Sep 28, 2010 6:49 pm

Hi
I shall send you my picture to give you inspiration please write a poem on me
Thanks
Best wishes {-: {-: {-:

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Thu Sep 30, 2010 5:17 pm

inspiration isn't given by photos only it's given by chatting and feelings
now u know that? i hope u got it
any way i'll be glad to get ur photo, it's my pleasure to c ur face and figure....
c u

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby farah » Wed Oct 13, 2010 3:49 pm

Hello
Please can you write a poem about me?
I send messege to you please read it and answer me.
I will wait to read the answer.
Bye

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby Aimee » Thu Oct 14, 2010 5:46 am

Really a heart touching poem friend. Noticing the word jail i first hesitated to read this poem. but now i feel happy that I read this. Superb!!!!!

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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Sat Oct 16, 2010 5:37 pm

hello
thnx ur words really encourage persons to write more and more
thnx again
plz make me favor and always show me ur comments
c u and have lovely moments


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