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WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Wed Oct 28, 2009 9:31 am

When hope ledt me i miss the way
Do not worry i did not lost even i forget the way the old way
Now i can feel happy.. maybe sad...maybe i do not know
What iam sure that i stopped running behind hopes behind old dreams inspite of being hard to me to live without DREAMS

The truth both ways are hard to live in to be like a machine or to fly in dreamland
both are full of danger plans hard crosses painfull choices


In the middle iam standing i can not remember how long seconds .. minutes .. hours ..or years i can not remeber wating for new light to walk towadrs a clue whatever is or still trying to find my way in drakness
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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Wed Nov 11, 2009 8:59 am

i fell bad 112 read my write and NO COMMENT :-? :-?
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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby Vega » Thu Nov 12, 2009 8:12 am

Hi. Don't worry that nobody lefts replies, maybe they read..get impressed and don't find right words to write.. :-)

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Thu Nov 12, 2009 10:02 am

maybe ur right
thanks for lefting reply
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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby shakespear » Sun Sep 19, 2010 7:12 pm

hi
i wasn't here when u write this and u know where i was so plz execuse me for not replying u and comment on this poem...
the poem is good and need some revise:

When hope led me i miss the way
Do not worry i did(am) not lost
even (if )i forget the way, the(that) old way
Now i can feel (i'm) happy..
maybe sad...
maybe i do not know
What iam sure that i stopped running
behind hopes... behind old dreams
inspite of being hard to me
(and )to live without DREAMS

The truth (was) both ways are hard to live in
to be like a machine or to fly in(to )dreamland
both are full of danger plans, hard crosses, painfull choices
In the middle i am standing
i can not remember how long seconds .. minutes .. hours ..or years
i can not remeber wating for new light
to walk towadrs a clue
whatever is or still trying to find my way in drakness

now i think its great
gd lk

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Tue Sep 21, 2010 5:40 am

goodmorning

first thank you so much for corrcting me u know how much i hate grammar it ties me and u know how much free iwana to be no rules at allllllllllllllllllllllllll

( iwanna to run the world in my way hahaha )

i belive in words to express feelings not in grammar maybe we are differnt at this point (which is more important meaning or grammar) in oddes and i'm sure most of people here agree with you


thanx for ur comment and correts agine
waiting ur new poem

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 21, 2010 6:20 pm

hello
u wanna live free koz u have poetess's soul but we can ignor grammar koz most meanings depend on grammar so it is one of the important bases of language for instance: i see u. & i saw u. the meaning is different in two sentences so past and present have different meanings.
its my point of view but first and final the matter is urs.
thnx and have sweet moments
c u

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Wed Sep 22, 2010 4:59 am

hellllllllllllo
and thanx

for ur comment about how grammar is imporant so let's make a deal ..............

i write and u correct me gramatically :lol: :lol: :lol:
(this odde was the last one i wrote )
maybe i'm still in this stage so i can not write new thing after i pass it and i guess (i'll not pass)


takecare

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby shakespear » Fri Sep 24, 2010 7:46 pm

hello
i think u r good in writing poems so u can continuo and i think u can write great poems when u want and i'll be happy to help u in grammar and in arranging ur poems
ur words hold supreme meanings and u have great ideas and thoughts so why u lose all these things?
we can help each others and write great poems
i won't forget ur help when u send ur comment and really ur comment sometimes inspire me in writing more and more so plz don't stop ur comments
thnx and have nice times
c u

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Sat Sep 25, 2010 5:46 am

goodmorning
thanx for ur cheering words but belive me wen i hold the pen and strat to write i have no feelings no emotins to talk about ifeel like empty glass and this touchring me and hurting me much
maybe i just scare to write agine

thanx agine

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby shakespear » Mon Sep 27, 2010 8:24 pm

hello
i think u r great so plz go ahead and don't fear to write , don't fear to make mistakes, i think u r bold
i'm waiting ur new poem
c u

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Tue Sep 28, 2010 3:51 pm

thanx for ur cheeeeeeeeeerings

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby muruganji » Tue Oct 05, 2010 6:01 pm

Dear Sweets

One time when kannan asked baskar

How did you feel without sweets in your life?

Immediately he told
when we seeing the sky in the night, there are countless stars are sparkling.It is Okay.
But among stars if the full moon is not appearing there, when the sky is not looking beautiful.
samething when my sweets is not in my life, my life is not beautiful.

from the baskar's diary
Murugan

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Tue Oct 05, 2010 7:41 pm

hi
plz reply on my message

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby Sunnypk » Wed Oct 06, 2010 5:14 am

Nice poem. Sweets :)

All the best for further writing.

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby sweets » Wed Oct 06, 2010 6:41 pm

thanx for ur comment sunny

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Re: WITH OR WITHOUT

Postby Sunnypk » Mon Oct 11, 2010 8:22 am

sweets wrote:thanx for ur comment sunny


U welcome dear sweets


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