Its my first post in this website. I am an English learner. So forgive me for my silly mistakes.
POEM - My Love
My sweet dream came more than true
When my love i saw someone like you
Everywhere i see i feel heavenly
I am so blessed i can now see clearly
Being with you makes me complete
It seems that we are a perfect fit
I never knew what sadness was
Now i feel them when we are apart
Distance cant separate both of us
As you always mend by broken heart
created by - ME
this is a dedicated poem for my lovely wife. Pray for us both guys. Thanks
My love [The Contest WINNER, April. 2011]
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Re: My love
hello and welecome here
for me I like the general idea it's so sweet and lovely to show your feelings towards who you love
but in same time you have little mistakes I'm sure that you did not note them
1- ( makes) it should be make because it comes after you
2-(them) it should be it beacause it reffers to sadness
this is what i note maybe others can find more
anyway do not give up and keep writing ok
for me I like the general idea it's so sweet and lovely to show your feelings towards who you love
but in same time you have little mistakes I'm sure that you did not note them
1- ( makes) it should be make because it comes after you
2-(them) it should be it beacause it reffers to sadness
this is what i note maybe others can find more
anyway do not give up and keep writing ok
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Re: My love
Hi Sweets !
thanks for your warm welcome and your sweet teachings. I really made a silly mistake writing make as makes. I should have rechecked my slip of pen. Lolz.
keep teaching me because i really would like to learn a lot.
Thanks again
thanks for your warm welcome and your sweet teachings. I really made a silly mistake writing make as makes. I should have rechecked my slip of pen. Lolz.
keep teaching me because i really would like to learn a lot.
Thanks again
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Re: My love
you are welcome anytime
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Re: My love
It's very good .. before and after SWEETS Correction.
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Re: My love
Thanks monaji . Thanks very much
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Re: My love
a good poem and wonderful idea ....
welcome friend...waiting for more....
welcome friend...waiting for more....
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Re: My love [The Contest WINNER, April. 2011]
Keep up the good work! ;)
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Re: My love [The Contest WINNER, April. 2011]
hi friend
ur poem is very lovley and i think u can write more and more koz u have spring of soft words and ideas
the word (makes) is not mistake koz it came after the term (being with you) not after the word (you) only.about the the 2nd notice i think the friend sweet is right.
4give me and i hope u go ahead and write more.......
c u
ur poem is very lovley and i think u can write more and more koz u have spring of soft words and ideas
the word (makes) is not mistake koz it came after the term (being with you) not after the word (you) only.about the the 2nd notice i think the friend sweet is right.
4give me and i hope u go ahead and write more.......
c u