LIFE FALL

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LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Thu May 05, 2011 9:26 pm

Life-fall

The orange sun’s fallen behind that line
Behind distant horizon, losing its shine
The darkness will reign soon, stretch its black limbs
Control the world, deploy fear on the rims
The fire will turn faint, a cold wind will blow
We approach the life-fall, our steps are slow
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
I close my eyes, stretch my hands in air
Try to imagine your eyes, your lips, your hair
Dream touching your face, your features and cheeks
Smell your warm breath and fly to the high peaks
Hug your vision and find I hug just space
Then grief pervades my soul, my heart, my face
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Your wide eyes seem so clear in the moonlight
Seem as silver pools… is it my first sight?
Did I see them before, as calm as now
To your eyes’ beauty we all must bow
Spring grants the world new buds, flowers and scent
Why does it last short as if it is lent?
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
All sweet things in the nature don’t last long
We are like scattered words in a swan-song
A dead’s got nothing but soil in his fist
So sing the sad song before death-harvest
A sea-nymph will play her eternal tune
And in night, I draw your face on the moon
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Oh sweet days last long I’ll meet my mistress
Tell the spring not to end and try one kiss
You won’t leave, you won’t know any season
And you’ll love the moon, the silent horizon
Embrace the trees and birds, sing in whisper
“Let’s live our joy, it’s our last nice supper”
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++

MY REGARDS

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby manal » Fri May 06, 2011 8:25 am

despite the strain of sadness and melncoly....i liked it..
for me ,i feel that this poem tells the story of our life,,
we interest the beauty and sweetness of our life,,but this enjoiment is very much acompied by the fear of loosing and sebaration,,,,
u have given the solution at the end,,lets live the current moment and never think about what is going to happen.....as it may never come......
okey,that what i felt as i read ur poem,shakespeare....
well done , friend...u know very much my view about all ur thoughts and poems...keep it up

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life fall

Postby sweets » Fri May 06, 2011 8:29 am

hi friend and welcome back u were ubset 4 long time but u didn't lose ur talent of course. i'll comment so soon with hope to like it i'm just posting now 2 express my pleasure with u. ur poem is so powerful and full of strong glommy passion emontion i'll back soon so don't disappear again

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Fri May 06, 2011 8:47 am

thanx all
i hope u like this poem ,really i tried to write sth perfect koz i know u won't let me pass without filtering the poem so one have to b careful with u koz u r so good in poetry
i hope all of u r well
best wishes

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby sweets » Sat May 07, 2011 7:25 pm

heeeelllo

i hope to read his reply soon

snice we born we knew that after a night there is a day

snice we born we learned easy come ..easy go

snice we born we realized that nothing stay as it's


snice we born we learned that life could be dream could be nightmare

so do not stop dreaming
and
be sure
that oneday

ur night will be a day

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Sat May 07, 2011 10:48 pm

sweets wrote:ur night will be a day

i like this term
thnx 4 this reply and i wana warn u about one mistake , of course its grammatically:
snice we born ................the right is , snice we're born that means since we were born.

i think ur poem is lovely and u can make it perfect poem.
have lovely times
good luck

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby sweets » Sun May 08, 2011 7:08 am

goodmorning
why u did not reply on pm. message??????

well i'm not look 4 perfiction as long i'm looking to express myself & my feelings

thanx 4 correction

have sweetday

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Sun May 08, 2011 8:16 am

hi
sweets wrote:well i'm not look 4 perfiction as long i'm looking to express myself & my feelings

ok that is good say but if we want to express our thoughts and feeling clearly we have to adjust our speech and decorate it to be convincing and as its said " right needs mouths" that means needs correct, strong, rhetorical words.....
i want just show my point of view
thnx a lot 4 ur lovely reply
c u

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby manal » Sun May 08, 2011 7:16 pm

"right needs mouths"...i like this saying...

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Sun May 08, 2011 9:53 pm

hi
thnx , i know y u like this term koz u understand it and ppl in our countries need this term to get rid of unjustice
c u

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby manal » Mon May 09, 2011 6:17 am

yes,,we need it,,not only in our countries but even within the limitation of our thoughts....
good luck..

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby sweets » Tue May 10, 2011 5:25 am

right needs mouths & actions too

what happens in our countries is an reaction of years of unjustice ,,,courrpution &fake promises

if they were not moving these days so when ???????????????????????
it's good to see ppl finally took a real action in their lifes

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Tue May 10, 2011 7:31 am

hello
woooooooooooow
yes u r right
actions in addition to mouths and wt happened in our countries as u said, is a reaction agianst unjustice and severeness from governments towards the poor citizens and people.i agree with u friends and u've said the truth and we need to change our bad thoughts , ideas and every things about the reign in our countries. rulers must know how to treat ppl , how to give them freedom. freedom isnot just words , its actions and practice. why we can b like foreign countries like france, britain, usa, and others , we, the arabs, were the most applying justice in the world , we teach world justice and now we r at the back of procession.
ok thnx
c u and have nice moments

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby manal » Tue May 10, 2011 2:50 pm

hi friends,,
yes,it is exactly as u said...okey..with people full of awarness like u,,,i believe our countries will do better in the coming years...good luck

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Wed May 11, 2011 7:25 am

hello
thnx of ur soft words and i agree with that our ppl have ot be aware of all that, rulers stole and still steal peopl's fortune , rulers kill our son's and brothers and parents in cold blood
people now r awaking up and will not stop
goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood luck

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby farah » Sat May 21, 2011 9:57 pm

HELLO SHAKESPEAR
HOW ARE YOU?
YOU SPEAK THE TRUTH AND WE HAVE TO KNOW THE RIGHT THINGS AND FOLLOW AND KNOW THE WRONG THINGS AND AVOID
I WANTED JUST TO SHOW MY IDEA
THANKX A LOT

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Tue Jun 14, 2011 7:59 am

hello
that's r8 and i think u understand it
have nice moments

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby farah » Wed Aug 10, 2011 7:48 am

HI FRIENDS
I WISH YOU HAVE YOUR WISHES
BYE

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Thu Aug 11, 2011 1:38 am

u2 thnx friend

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Re: LIFE FALL

Postby shakespear » Tue Oct 18, 2011 5:11 am

shakespear wrote:Life-fall

The orange sun’s fallen behind that line
Behind distant horizon, losing its shine
The darkness will reign soon, stretch its black limbs
Control the world, deploy fear on the rims
The fire will turn faint, a cold wind will blow
We approach the life-fall, our steps are slow
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
I close my eyes, stretch my hands in air
Try to imagine your eyes, your lips, your hair
Dream touching your face, your features and cheeks
Smell your warm breath and fly to the high peaks
Hug your vision and find I hug just space
Then grief pervades my soul, my heart, my face
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Your wide eyes seem so clear in the moonlight
Seem as silver pools… is it my first sight?
Did I see them before, as calm as now
To your eyes’ beauty we all must bow
Spring grants the world new buds, flowers and scent
Why does it last short as if it is lent?
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
All sweet things in the nature don’t last long
We are like scattered words in a swan-song
A dead’s got nothing but soil in his fist
So sing the sad song before death-harvest
A sea-nymph will play her eternal tune
And in night, I draw your face on the moon
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
Oh sweet days last long I’ll meet my mistress
Tell the spring not to end and try one kiss
You won’t leave, you won’t know any season
And you’ll love the moon, the silent horizon
Embrace the trees and birds, sing in whisper
“Let’s live our joy, it’s our last nice supper”
+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++




i like this poem
its one of my lovable poems
c u all


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