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Eve & Adam
It is me who one day knocked your door
And you are who meanwhile asked me to come in
And you are yourself who gave me the delicious apple
And tempted me to eat it
You are now asking me to go out
And warning me not to come close
to your palace.
Where is your promising hope?
Nothing can be seen on the horizon but mirage
Where are your promises?
Were they dust as foam?
Were they mere nonsense?
Don't you remember your words?
About love....
About kindness.....
About emotion.....
Now I know your falsity
But after it's too late
I roved all countries, holding my troubles
Which were parts of me
Part of my memories
I wanted to bury them
As a miserable one
Wanting to bury his killed brother
I held my troubles
As a traveller holding his bags
Aiming to reach behind boundaries
And he will not
our life is like a night mare
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shakespear
now i feel that ur peot this time stands against women at all u consider them as the main reason of suffering in the worls since u use eve and adam story that we know it

but in general i like it
cheeeeeeeeers
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sweet u seem at computer at this moment and ur comment is important for me .
it`s not against women
our life is like a night mare
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well ur peot this time i don't how to describ
let me think then write my cooment
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Hi sweet
U didn`t comment on my poem.
I think I`m in need to ur comment.
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shakespear wrote:Eve & Adam
It is me who one day knocked your door
And you are who meanwhile asked me to come in
And you are yourself who gave me the delicious apple
And tempted me to eat it
You are now asking me to go out
And warning me not to come close
to your palace.
Where is your promising hope?
Nothing can be seen on the horizon but mirage
Where are your promises?
Were they dust as foam?
Were they mere nonsense?
Don't you remember your words?
About love....
About kindness.....
About emotion.....
Now I know your falsity
But after it's too late
I roved all countries, holding my troubles
Which were parts of me
Part of my memories
I wanted to bury them
As a miserable one
Wanting to bury his killed brother
I held my troubles
As a traveller holding his bags
Aiming to reach behind boundaries
And he will not
this poem remindes me the sad times i have lived.
i like to remenber every seconds
good luck
our life is like a night mare
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hi everyone
our life is like a night mare
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there is sadness again in it.
u wanna make the woman behind ur sufferings, i.e a woman is the cause of the suffering.
nonsense
we have to live our life freely
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sorry
i didn't see this comment
thnx
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hi shakespear
i am a new member here ,and each time i read a poem of u i like to post my replay about it ,
i hope u accept my comments,

what i wanna say is that u r a wonderful poet
ur words touch me

so,keep it up,
and i hope u accept me as a frind
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hello
u r welcome any time and i am very happy to meet u and chat with u . really i like u to post me comments and don't mind if u have something to explain it about my poems even if u have critical views plz say anything u feel about them
thnx and i wanna read ur comments
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manar wrote:hi shakespear

what i wanna say is that u r a wonderful poet
ur words touch me

so,keep it up,
really u encourged me much
thanks lots
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Nice
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A woman can feel if the person is true or not. :-)
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that's r8 koz she has soft, transparent,gauzy heart so she can see through it but although she can see the truth and false but if she loves she can leave whom she loves i.e although she knows the deceiver but she can't quit or leave koz she loved him, she is loyal and this loyalty makes her weak, she is romantic and this romance makes her easy-deceived
thanks 4 ur comments
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hmm well i wouldnt like to remember my bad memories, but those ones are stronger than the good ones, and they will be in our memories, healed but still there.
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man is known as a hard and not sotf vise versa the woman ,,,she is known as soft , kind
but sometimes there are men more soft than women and follow thier lover to eadge of abyss
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shakespear wrote:man is known as a hard and not sotf vise versa the woman ,,,she is known as soft , kind
but sometimes there are men more soft than women and follow thier lover to eadge of abyss

is this right or false??//
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RENEW OLD POEMS
our life is like a night mare
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