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It's time

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It's time to say bye
To lies
To old memories

It's time to say bye for old days for sad nights
This is the time to leave all that behind

Tomorrow it' will be no more of that no lies no fakes

Goodbye my love it's time to pass
Do not think just let me pass
Because I do not care no more
I fed up waiting &wasting time
days go like shade of old dreams
without taste without color without melodies

what ever you do I'll not wait
it's your time to set &wait

so it's time to say Goodbye
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Re: It's time

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It's just the time to announce a winner of our small humble contest "Inspirational Post of the Month". Congratulations, Sweets!

However, I'm not quite sure about what exactly you tried to convey through:
sweets wrote:Goodbye my love it's time to pass
Do not think just let me pass
Because I do not care no more..
It seems a little bit suicidal..If I am mistaken, sorry! :-)

Nevertheless, don't say Goodbye to us dear writers. I hope to see your new poems for the next month!

Regards,

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how nice it is to take the suitable decision in the correct time!
hello sweets,i m happy that u finally find the topic that inspires u,go on :-D
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congratulations my friend
really u deserve it
its a good poem koz it is full of senses and soft words
i don't want to spoil ur happiness but i found one mistake that u used 2 negatives in one sentence and i think this made weakness in the line:
sweets wrote:Because I do not care no more
i think u can say: Because I care no more ...or ...Because I do not care any more
forgive me plz koz i can't prevent my self with these things
thnx and go ahead
congratulations again
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wooooooooooooooow i did not imagen to be the winner for this month man thanx to all

vega
"It seems a little bit suicidal..If I am mistaken, sorry"

well i have suicidal mood nowadays so ur not in mistake

manal
"how nice it is to take the suitable decision in the correct time!
hello sweets,i m happy that u finally find the topic that inspires u,go "


thanx for ur words and no more to say about &i hope to find new inspiration sooooon

shakespear

"don't want to spoil ur happiness but i found one mistake that u used 2 negatives in one sentence and i think this made weakness in the line:"

no need to say sorry it's my fault at first beside u know i do not care much about grammer moreover when i start writing i canot stop to correct !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

thanx to all of u
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u r moooooooooooooooooooooost welcome my friend {-:
i am so much happy for ur happiness,go ahead {-:
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it's wonderful to hear that dear freind
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Dear Sweets

This is what we expect from you

we are the passing clouds may be it has hide the moon(Sweets) for sometime
but it cant keep within it
but the sky(Baskar) has the moon(sweets) every seconds, microseconds, mintues, anhour, everyday, and every moment.

Both sky and moon can't seperate from each other

we are so glad lookafter then your poem

Because you are starting to hate us,

thats what we expect from you

that's enough for us. because you are ready to start to find a new and bright life.

Go ahead. Baskar will not coming back for you and for us.

Don't look back, Go ahead

Our blessings with you

Muruganji

One more thing,
Mr. Kannan (hard Person) is return back from cairo last month during his visit for business he suffered a lot.

He is highly ediot to inform you at that time where he was?
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hi murgan really u suprise me &i'm so happy 4 that

u know i think u have a good sense to write why u do not try and share us?????????
i'll not go back trust me this time but i can't hate you wht ever happened

send my regards to Kannan i knew wht e suffere in Cario due to disturbance anywa thanx to Allah that he back safely to his family

keep coming here plz. and send messages a lot
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Dear Sweets

Actually I don't have sense to write

In his(Baskar) odds described you as you are the full moon

That's what I told the fact

otherwise i won't attract you from my side

You wrote, I would not go back, trust me

why did you say like that

don't ruin your life, First job,then be support your family financially, and finally get bright future. can you understand?

You promise me first and then I think to continue to communicate or not with you

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hi murugan
just read my message and u'll know everything
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double o.k
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i'm waiting ur reply right now
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SEEMS VERY GOOD POEM
I READ IT AND I LIKE IT MUCH
VERY GOOD
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thank farah for ur comment it's lovely to see u again
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Nice sharing.
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thanks for ur comment
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So heart touching and sad :-(
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maybe one day i'll smile form ny heart

thanx for ur comment
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One you will smile from your heart? Do you mean you smile from your kidney now? :lol: :lol: :lol:
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of course no and i know ur joking but u can say i'm wearing a mask o cover myself
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GOOD post sweets, keep on sharing.
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Hi sweets. I really like your poem. But sad to note letting go of the past is really hard.Hai.....life...
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thanx for ur comment cuteboy but u know sometimes u have to let past go to go on ur life
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nice! I like it sweets :)
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oh krisi thanx for u comment
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