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Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Thu Aug 07, 2008 8:25 am

To the lovely foreign dumb woman

Eyes-language

Don`t veil your eyes
They are the loveliest part you have
They are the windows of your spirit
And through them I can travel inside you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me swim in your spring
* * *
Your eyes are fathomless
But I can probe them
You are always silent
But through your eyes
I can understand you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me fly in your sky

* * *
You look at me and I look at you
You understand me and I understand you
You move your lips hoping to speak
And I fidget in my seat hoping
to hear your voice
And even if you speak
I can`t understand you
We have different tongues
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me die in your lap
* * *
our life is like a night mare

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby sweets » Thu Aug 07, 2008 5:01 pm

hi shakespear

againe same sad missing tone in ur poem i know that u know that life is mixture between pain and passion but we always look to positive side of life so try and look at iam sure that u need time to see

in general i like ur poem cuz this time is about eyes language and i know how meanings it carry

best wishes

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Sat Aug 09, 2008 12:45 pm

hi sweet
ur words is better than my poem
c u later
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby loola » Sat Aug 09, 2008 11:45 pm

thanks my friend for ur poem ..
nice words , really i like it

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Tue Aug 19, 2008 3:47 pm

hi loola
u r very kind and ur words encourage me and i think every one needs to be encouraged from time to time
thnx again
good luck and bye
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby ailema » Wed Sep 03, 2008 2:59 pm

thast a very very nice writing there and its really expresing feelings of the maker

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Sat Sep 06, 2008 2:32 pm

hi my friend
thnx very much 4 these words and i hope we meet again in future
thnx agsin and c u later
buye
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Sat Nov 22, 2008 11:14 am

hi everyone and goodluck
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby farah » Wed Mar 04, 2009 8:42 am

is it a real story or imagination?
we have to live our life freely

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby Mohyiedine » Wed Apr 22, 2009 1:18 pm

hey friend, i noticed this poem it has a deep meaning without doubting, not only that also i observed you can express more than thus Coz you have ability to do it , in general you are good and i like it.
in finally i wish to you develop your ability and be a famous poet

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Mon Apr 27, 2009 12:42 pm

hi my friend Mohyiedine
really u encouragedme and i hope u explain my faults and weak lines koz i`m in need to know the weakness of my lines
plz i`m waiting ur comments and plz speak frankly!
where r u from???
c u soon and gd luck
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby Mohyiedine » Tue Apr 28, 2009 12:15 pm

hi shakespear, in the first i haven't meant you have the weak lines, Bt i wanted to give you my opinion of that poem, that sujet which you expressed about your writing has a deep essense for that , i told you, you can write or express more than thus.
one thing i liked in your writing that's you can play with words without any difficults, not only that also you can give the poem an aesthetic sight....
as for your question that's where am i from , im from Morocco, do you know it

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Tue Apr 28, 2009 2:37 pm

hi
yes i know ur country koz i`m iraqi and i like people of moroco and thnx 4 ur comment and i hope to meet u much
c u soon and gd luck
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby justme » Tue May 19, 2009 8:12 am

waw shakespear u write a wonderful , yes eyes is a window of our body , we can see inner and find all things that some one want hide us !
Thanx
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Mon Jun 29, 2009 11:57 am

hi
thnx justme
ur name is like a start of a poem
have lovely times
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby farah » Tue Aug 04, 2009 11:21 am

hi
expressing poem and has good idea
hhhhhhhhhhhhhh
c u
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Sat Aug 08, 2009 10:18 am

thnx really u r kind
thnx again
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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Sat Oct 16, 2010 6:38 pm

shakespear wrote:To the lovely foreign dumb woman

Eyes-language

Don`t veil your eyes
They are the loveliest part you have
They are the windows of your spirit
And through them I can travel inside you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me swim in your spring
* * *
Your eyes are fathomless
But I can probe them
You are always silent
But through your eyes
I can understand you
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me fly in your sky

* * *
You look at me and I look at you
You understand me and I understand you
You move your lips hoping to speak
And I fidget in my seat hoping
to hear your voice
And even if you speak
I can`t understand you
We have different tongues
So don`t veil your eyes
And let me die in your lap
* * *


show me ur comment plz

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby Lara » Thu Aug 04, 2011 1:04 am

"the eyes are the mirror of the soul" i like this phrase taken from the Bible; look at this quote: "Your eye is the lamp of your body. When your eyes are good, your whole body also is full of light. But when they are bad, your body also is full of darkness" Luke 11:34 from Bible
i lked it :)

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby shakespear » Fri Aug 05, 2011 6:55 am

hi lara and thnx 4 ur comment
really i didn't read the bible , i'm moslem and i didn't take care of bible till u told me that u found this term in this holy book...
thanx 4 u making me know that
my best wishes

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Re: Eyes-language

Postby farah » Wed Aug 10, 2011 8:59 am

GREAT GREAT GREAT :-D :-D :-D


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