DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
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DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
Closely she whispered, her breath touched my ear
Time ago I didn't think of my past life
Now suddenly I feel inside me fear
In My heart, you have hard fixed your blunt knife
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She begged me not to make her weak next time
She used to be strict, hard as her father
She can't bear lovely speech, she hate soft rhyme
Try just once, than before you'll be smoother
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I made you of illusions, desires, and dreams
My statue will fall at the bleeding end
You work hard to destroy all my hopes, beams
unseen sky, deep seas… me you like to send
000000000000000000000000……3
God created us all of water and soil
On the earth ,the sons of the sky can't live
always you make my blood in my veins boil
we're not angels holding branch of olive
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I don't listen to you, though you are wise
No more I do open my heart's window
That I believe in my fatal demise
Accepting my fate, I start feeling low
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I know you desire me more as I do
So don't say any more, "Don't make me weak"
We are both alone, we can't find love in true
We have no time to spend on check or seek
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The wheel of the world's law will still revolve
We are not stones, dry trees or blocks of ice
How can we convince our needs? can you solve?
If the stone can breed, it will be very nice
000000000000000000000000……7
I'm not satan and you are not angel
I have virtues and you may have a vice
You have magic stick? convert the devil!
We make it once, why don't we make it twice?
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Wooooooooow………. I finished it and hope you enjoy reading it……… I hope you forgive my rudeness and badness, its just a poem ….some of it true and the most are false, so please don't criticize the idea and I like you concentrat on the style and diction. Thnx, plz send me ur comments koz I in need to ….
have happy times.
Closely she whispered, her breath touched my ear
Time ago I didn't think of my past life
Now suddenly I feel inside me fear
In My heart, you have hard fixed your blunt knife
000000000000000000000000……1
She begged me not to make her weak next time
She used to be strict, hard as her father
She can't bear lovely speech, she hate soft rhyme
Try just once, than before you'll be smoother
000000000000000000000000……2
I made you of illusions, desires, and dreams
My statue will fall at the bleeding end
You work hard to destroy all my hopes, beams
unseen sky, deep seas… me you like to send
000000000000000000000000……3
God created us all of water and soil
On the earth ,the sons of the sky can't live
always you make my blood in my veins boil
we're not angels holding branch of olive
000000000000000000000000……4
I don't listen to you, though you are wise
No more I do open my heart's window
That I believe in my fatal demise
Accepting my fate, I start feeling low
000000000000000000000000……5
I know you desire me more as I do
So don't say any more, "Don't make me weak"
We are both alone, we can't find love in true
We have no time to spend on check or seek
000000000000000000000000……6
The wheel of the world's law will still revolve
We are not stones, dry trees or blocks of ice
How can we convince our needs? can you solve?
If the stone can breed, it will be very nice
000000000000000000000000……7
I'm not satan and you are not angel
I have virtues and you may have a vice
You have magic stick? convert the devil!
We make it once, why don't we make it twice?
000000000000000000000000……8
Wooooooooow………. I finished it and hope you enjoy reading it……… I hope you forgive my rudeness and badness, its just a poem ….some of it true and the most are false, so please don't criticize the idea and I like you concentrat on the style and diction. Thnx, plz send me ur comments koz I in need to ….
have happy times.
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
shakespear wrote:I'm not satan and you are not angel.
Shakespear tell me your secret to write as you do it! well i dont know what to say, I think every body has feelings, and not all people will show it in the same way, or maybe some of us are afraid to love, this because of bad experiences, etc that's why we dont wanna the same situation repeats again. :)
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hi
thnx 4 ur comment and i wana say u seem wise and ur words encouraged me
thnx again
thnx 4 ur comment and i wana say u seem wise and ur words encouraged me
thnx again
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u r welcome friend!!
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i think its true not falseshakespear wrote:We are not stones, dry trees or blocks of ice
have nice moments
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
shaki my freind
how bad u said about this poem but ur genius man u never lost ur talent or creativity
well i like the idea so much how love can let us confused ....lost between mind & heart this conflict which can last forever as i can see how to combain between them just tell me how ??
we are not stones, angles , santa or devils we simply are human beings man !!!!!!!!!!
finally ur poem in general is an invitation to release from any bonds can kill any pure honset feelings in this world no matter mind & heart are aruging with
welcome backkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
how bad u said about this poem but ur genius man u never lost ur talent or creativity
well i like the idea so much how love can let us confused ....lost between mind & heart this conflict which can last forever as i can see how to combain between them just tell me how ??
we are not stones, angles , santa or devils we simply are human beings man !!!!!!!!!!
finally ur poem in general is an invitation to release from any bonds can kill any pure honset feelings in this world no matter mind & heart are aruging with
welcome backkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
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Yes; it's true, but some of us wanna overcome our weaknesses,and i belive in this phrase, and it's one of my goals: "Let the weakling say, "I am strong!"" Joel 3:10, and it encourages me to continue being as i am, so if we wanna be weak or strong it's our decisonshakespear wrote:shakespear wrote:We are not stones, dry trees or blocks of ice
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hi
thnx 4 ur comments
sweets i wana c ur poems ...try and try , don't stop
thnx lara 4 ur interest
have nice moments
my regards
thnx 4 ur comments
sweets i wana c ur poems ...try and try , don't stop
thnx lara 4 ur interest
have nice moments
my regards
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
i'm trying my best but nothing come maybe i loose my talent forever
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hi
special ppl , distinguised ppl like us won't lose thier talent koz that means they die, so they keep thier gift till they reach to the grave...so try that u have sth inside u but it needs to motivate it and u'll find it b4 ur eyes , among ur fingers.....u'll find it marvelous poem as ur child moving and breathing...
c u with new poem
special ppl , distinguised ppl like us won't lose thier talent koz that means they die, so they keep thier gift till they reach to the grave...so try that u have sth inside u but it needs to motivate it and u'll find it b4 ur eyes , among ur fingers.....u'll find it marvelous poem as ur child moving and breathing...
c u with new poem
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
thanx for cheering up me freind i promise to write sooooooooon
takecare
takecare
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hello
i know u can do it so i'll be waiting 4 u to show me ur new poem
have lovely moments
i know u can do it so i'll be waiting 4 u to show me ur new poem
have lovely moments
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i hope that i could write one sooooooooooooooon
takecare
takecare
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hello
i know u can
just take pencil and write anything so u can finally read a wonderful poem
c u
i know u can
just take pencil and write anything so u can finally read a wonderful poem
c u
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i promise i'll do my best as long as i found pencile
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
Dear Sweets
There is no need pencil to write for a poem
You speak,the sound is Music, when you speak, words are coming out
These are Lyrics, when you smile with shy
Several Butterflies flies in Shakes mind
If you there with shakes, every year becomes a minute to him
If you not there with shakes, minutes are becomes years to him
You are the inspiration to Shakes
Murugan
There is no need pencil to write for a poem
You speak,the sound is Music, when you speak, words are coming out
These are Lyrics, when you smile with shy
Several Butterflies flies in Shakes mind
If you there with shakes, every year becomes a minute to him
If you not there with shakes, minutes are becomes years to him
You are the inspiration to Shakes
Murugan
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ohhhhhh murgan
ur like moon beams that come in clear nights
thanx for cheering up
ur like moon beams that come in clear nights
thanx for cheering up
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
hello friends
my friend muruganji thnx 4 this comment but plz don't guess things koz its private
any way thnx 4 ur comment
i think this term can be soft line of lovely poem....muruganji wrote: If you there with shakes, every year becomes a minute to him
my friend muruganji thnx 4 this comment but plz don't guess things koz its private
any way thnx 4 ur comment
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Dear Shakes
I am so sorry to open the concept in between both of you
But I can't control myself
We really glad with fullfill after seen Titanic, after readed with romeo julite. lila and Majnu
samething members should give green signal to both of you
Any way, you are the ocean you appreciate me through about my poem
I have to say here about one thing
You are the Hero in this club and I am your friend
In Indian Cinema contains the hero's friend always help hero's Love
Moreover he sacrifice his life at the enemies of the hero,for his friend hero's love
I am friend of Shakes
Anyway you appriciate my lines
Thanks
Muruganji
I am so sorry to open the concept in between both of you
But I can't control myself
We really glad with fullfill after seen Titanic, after readed with romeo julite. lila and Majnu
samething members should give green signal to both of you
Any way, you are the ocean you appreciate me through about my poem
I have to say here about one thing
You are the Hero in this club and I am your friend
In Indian Cinema contains the hero's friend always help hero's Love
Moreover he sacrifice his life at the enemies of the hero,for his friend hero's love
I am friend of Shakes
Anyway you appriciate my lines
Thanks
Muruganji
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hi my friend muruganji
its my pleasure to b ur friend and i wana say sorry koz i blamed u about this matter ....plz don't be sorry that i have to b sorry ...u r so kind and i hope we can be close friends
my regards and best wishes
have nice moments
its my pleasure to b ur friend and i wana say sorry koz i blamed u about this matter ....plz don't be sorry that i have to b sorry ...u r so kind and i hope we can be close friends
my regards and best wishes
have nice moments
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helllllllllllllllllo
sorry for being absent all that time
i'm happy that things are ok between u and murgan
have a sweetday for both
sorry for being absent all that time
i'm happy that things are ok between u and murgan
have a sweetday for both
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muruganji wrote:Dear Shakes
I am so sorry to open the concept in between both of you
But I can't control myself
We really glad with fullfill after seen Titanic, after readed with romeo julite. lila and Majnu
samething members should give green signal to both of you
Any way, you are the ocean you appreciate me through about my poem
I have to say here about one thing
You are the Hero in this club and I am your friend
In Indian Cinema contains the hero's friend always help hero's Love
Moreover he sacrifice his life at the enemies of the hero,for his friend hero's love
I am friend of Shakes
Anyway you appriciate my lines
Thanks
Muruganji
hi murgan
i'm so happy that u could mange things btw u and shaki and thanx for trying to fix things and thanx for being my freind
i wanna read ut updates in a message plz
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
Dear Sweets
These are your arrangements I knew
Unless he does not know about me
Thanks He understood me
Thanks you are the reason for it
Murugan
These are your arrangements I knew
Unless he does not know about me
Thanks He understood me
Thanks you are the reason for it
Murugan
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thnx friend
i hope u r well and hope u write more and more to enrich us with lovely things
c u and have nice moments
i hope u r well and hope u write more and more to enrich us with lovely things
c u and have nice moments
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
Hi ,Dark .ur poem moved me a lot ,u are gentle and fragile in ur side from ur poem .
but now u are not weak anymore ,u are strong enough .the deeper love u dedicate ur beloved
; the deeper hurt u would get...we are human being, not angel,not satan,I believe that u have ur own magic trick which convert u perfect.moving on
but now u are not weak anymore ,u are strong enough .the deeper love u dedicate ur beloved
; the deeper hurt u would get...we are human being, not angel,not satan,I believe that u have ur own magic trick which convert u perfect.moving on
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woooooooooow really its lovely comment...
my friend wendywenyuan
thnx for sending this sweet comment and i hope we can communicate in future more and more...thnx againg
keep contact plz
have nice day
my friend wendywenyuan
thnx for sending this sweet comment and i hope we can communicate in future more and more...thnx againg
keep contact plz
have nice day
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hi all
i think we'd better forget bad things and just look at good things so we have to try and try once and twice till we get our goal..
thnx
i think we'd better forget bad things and just look at good things so we have to try and try once and twice till we get our goal..
thnx
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Peace & Love in this Club
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thnx and i pray god to give us mercy and keep me and all my friends safe...ya rabLara wrote:Peace & Love in this Club
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after some years i discover i have a poem. i like this poemshakespear wrote:DON'T MAKE ME WEAK
Closely she whispered, her breath touched my ear
Time ago I didn't think of my past life
Now suddenly I feel inside me fear
In My heart, you have hard fixed your blunt knife
000000000000000000000000……1
She begged me not to make her weak next time
She used to be strict, hard as her father
She can't bear lovely speech, she hate soft rhyme
Try just once, than before you'll be smoother
000000000000000000000000……2
I made you of illusions, desires, and dreams
My statue will fall at the bleeding end
You work hard to destroy all my hopes, beams
unseen sky, deep seas… me you like to send
000000000000000000000000……3
God created us all of water and soil
On the earth ,the sons of the sky can't live
always you make my blood in my veins boil
we're not angels holding branch of olive
000000000000000000000000……4
I don't listen to you, though you are wise
No more I do open my heart's window
That I believe in my fatal demise
Accepting my fate, I start feeling low
000000000000000000000000……5
I know you desire me more as I do
So don't say any more, "Don't make me weak"
We are both alone, we can't find love in true
We have no time to spend on check or seek
000000000000000000000000……6
The wheel of the world's law will still revolve
We are not stones, dry trees or blocks of ice
How can we convince our needs? can you solve?
If the stone can breed, it will be very nice
000000000000000000000000……7
I'm not satan and you are not angel
I have virtues and you may have a vice
You have magic stick? convert the devil!
We make it once, why don't we make it twice?
000000000000000000000000……8
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