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you're poor

Postby shakespear » Tue Dec 07, 2010 3:05 pm

You’re poor

As you’re a poor man, you can’t like or hate
A human third rank, you’re less than a dog
She ignores you, insults you, it’s you’re fate….
To be poor and your ways are full of fog
She cares for her dog, who cares if you’re late?
Who cares if you’re alive or died in a bog?
Sleep or not; well or ill… it’s same in rate
She won’t come although you will , long time, wait
* * *
Day after day, their money will increase
And your troubles with poverty increase too
You want peace and love, you often whisper please
They don’t care for peace, they always yell boo
You like to see her? You may her dog tease
Don’t you see your sky cloudy? But theirs blue
In winter you suffer from cold and freeze
But warmed, she grumbles from honey of bees
* * *
If you sicken, you won’t find helping hand
None holds you, in your chest all will stab sword
And if you die, they’ll insert you in sand
None puts rose on your grave, by all you’re gored
You’d lived alone without beloved or band
It’s your sad fate, it’s the will of your lord
Now you’re without grave stone, you’re lost in land
Like all beings you died, but you’ll still be grand
* * *

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Re: you're poor

Postby sweets » Fri Dec 10, 2010 3:02 pm

hi
finally u post it
i'm so happy to read any thing u write at least to know that ur ok

takecare

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Mon Dec 13, 2010 7:07 pm

hi
thnx 4 ur msg but i need to hear ur comment about this poem ...is it good? is it bad? plz say any thing just show me ur point of view..
nice 2 hear about u and 2 know u r alive
c u and have good moments

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Re: you're poor

Postby Aimee » Wed Dec 29, 2010 12:00 pm

Hello shakespear,

Hope you are fine.
I am really impressed friend.
Every word in your poem speaks...

But i need some clarification. Please don't mistake me. Shall I ask?

Waiting to hear from you.

Regards,
Aimee.

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Re: you're poor

Postby manar » Mon Jan 03, 2011 9:19 pm

Hello shakespeare,

i very much liked ur soft feelings and i really wish u all the best.

a request i wanna ask,

that i want to send my creative writing to be shared but i dont no how to do it in this
website i hope to tell me how ?

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Tue Feb 01, 2011 9:12 pm

first i'm so sorry koz i wasn't here
thnx all of u ... my friend aimee thank u very much about ur friendly words and u can ask me whatever u like
and thank u manar for ur lovely comment and u can post ur writings by pressing on nwtopic and then u can send wt ever u want if u had registered in this club
at last i like to thank my close friend sweet 4 her comments and caring 4 me
good luck

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Fri Feb 04, 2011 9:14 pm

manar wrote:Hello shakespeare,

i very much liked ur soft feelings and i really wish u all the best.

a request i wanna ask,

that i want to send my creative writing to be shared but i dont no how to do it in this
website i hope to tell me how ?


i told u how to send ur writings and i don't know if u succeed or not
plz tell me

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Re: you're poor

Postby xtragirl » Wed May 11, 2011 3:14 pm

Hi,

Finally I can join this and send you some comment. Well.. After I read this, I think it's good. From up to bottom you have nice word and it's easy to think. Even I don't really good to send you some comment.
Good job..

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Thu May 12, 2011 8:19 am

thnx and welcome
our new friend
thnx again 4 this comment and plz keep contact and i think u r not bad in english
good luck

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Re: you're poor

Postby sweethuman » Tue May 17, 2011 4:43 am

Thanks for shakespear

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Wed May 18, 2011 10:27 pm

hello
u r so welcome and i hope we can communicate more in future...
have nice moments
c u

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Tue Aug 23, 2011 8:52 am

hi
i wana collect my poems and issu them in one topic
wt u say?

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Re: you're poor

Postby Lara » Sat Sep 10, 2011 7:07 pm

Hi again ! i this is a sad poem, was this poem about u or about anyone else?
Well noanimal is upper than a human, and besides u mentioned above, also a person is poor when he/she lacks of knowledge or feelings and thoughts... have a lovely day u 2 :)

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Wed Sep 14, 2011 2:09 am

i meant there r rich ppl treat poor ppl like animals or may b less than animals and may b treat their dogs or cats better than the poor

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Re: you're poor

Postby Lara » Wed Sep 14, 2011 4:13 am

So in this case, these "rich people" are the poor ones, their heart is poor.

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Thu Sep 15, 2011 9:02 am

woooooooow
i think its rich expression
thnx 4 this expression
have good day

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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 13, 2011 10:41 pm

who is the poor one in this world????

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Re: you're poor

Postby Lara » Fri Oct 14, 2011 4:40 am

humm Shakespear dont make me say names :lol:
the one who doesnt appreciate friendship and the one who just care about him/her and not about the others, and the one u mentioned in ur poem, the rich guy who thinks money is all in his life.

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Re: you're poor

Postby muruganji » Fri Oct 14, 2011 1:45 pm

Respected Lara (Please ignore the above one)
the one who doesnt appreciate friendship - That is True.
the one who just care about him/her and not about the others- That is not true, Don't Hurry and decided. Then There is no difference in between you and me. I considered, you are really great one.

As Shakes told you should go for good things along with everybody except me(Bad thing).

I will not come anymore in the ring

I hope, Shakes may be forgive me in future

But I will read your(Shakes) forthcoming poems without your permission

regards
Murugan

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Re: you're poor

Postby Lara » Fri Oct 14, 2011 8:35 pm

Hello respected Murugan

I wanna u to know my heart cries out for peace between us, does ur heart also ask u for that? :-D

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Re: you're poor

Postby muruganji » Sun Oct 16, 2011 2:28 pm

Dear Sweets

Well said and Thanks

But I can't come again in the ring.

I am a piece of a full glass. You can't stick it as it is before.

day by day Slowly i communicate with you and others. Now I like this club.

World is big, I will go with other members

Seriouly I said goodbye to you and friends.

Here no one can worry about it though i should say "bye"

Yesterday I am good, today I am bad and tomorrow?

we are all mixed by good and bad things. Openly I can say.

But we consider others by Ratio of good and bad. If one have good things in higher percentage than bad things, we consider he/she is a good.

If the bad things percentage is higher than good things, we consider, he/she is bad. I do not know who I am?

u need not reply for my post. Keep going ahead. God and myself with you

Take care

Murugan
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Note: Respected Lara, I still concentrate in myself, But my heart did not say anything as you said

regards
Murugan


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