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for you ........

Postby sweets » Fri Sep 23, 2011 3:42 pm

what to say.... what to write.... what to tell..what to do ...i've alot !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Mind is always busy with nonses
Heart is always busy without hope

what can i say about all of that
i can't change these facts
what to write about me ..you.. my tears.. my worries.. my confusing..
what to tell about shall i tell about you or your shades??
what to do leaving or staying escaping or backing to you ??

what to say ..what to write .. what to tell.. what to do
my mind will explode oneday
my heart will bomb because of you
my tears must stop oneday
so be sure that i will stop loving you soooooooon

now it's your turn so can you tell me what to say ..what to write ..what to do ??????
i'm waiting for you

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Re: for you ........

Postby shakespear » Sat Sep 24, 2011 4:13 am

hi friend ...
at last we have here so lovely piece of poetry...some thing reminds u of ur notions and thoughts when they pass through ur mind....this poem is a query with self...it's a soliloquy....and it's really some thing new we didn't do before...
u made me think to try like this art of soliloquy although it seems hard...
have nice moments and accept my regards

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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Sat Sep 24, 2011 6:03 am

gdmorning friend thanx 4 ur this comment and i hope to ur reply in poetic way soon

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Re: for you ........

Postby shakespear » Sun Sep 25, 2011 6:12 am

gd morning
so i'll be waiting 4 ur poems and u'll find me always here close and waiting to reply and to write poems...
i hope u succeed in ur life and have nice times

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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Tue Sep 27, 2011 4:37 am

thanx for ur wishes dear well i'm working in new one when i be free so maybe next week i'll post it

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Re: for you ........

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 27, 2011 9:40 pm

hello
i hope to hear good news from u and i'm happy u work on new one....i feel so lazy to write one although inside me there is a poem wana go out but i imprisone it and not allow it to see the light...
have nice moments

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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Wed Sep 28, 2011 4:54 am

i'll tell u the same words you told me before
hold the pen .....the words come by itself

have a sweet day

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Re: for you ........

Postby Lara » Wed Sep 28, 2011 5:25 am

sweets wrote:what to say ..what to write .. what to tell.. what to do
my mind will explode oneday
my heart will bomb because of you
my tears must stop oneday
so be sure that i will stop loving you soooooooon
now it's your turn so can you tell me what to say ..what to write ..what to do ??????
i'm waiting for you


hi Sweets!! :) i really liked this poem, specially when u said "now it's your turn so can you tell me what to say ..what to write ..what to do ??????" Well my point of view is that she/he expresses all her/his feelings and thoughs to her/his love, but without having any answer or signal. Am i right? See You :)

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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Thu Sep 29, 2011 5:41 am

hello Lara
well she \he expresses all what she/he want form his/her beloved as a despress massage and i'm 75% sure that she/he won't have any answer .

he /she givesup waiting and giving chances for the other part but what you can say it's LOVE do u agree ith me ?????????

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Re: for you ........

Postby Lara » Thu Sep 29, 2011 7:04 pm

that's not love, that's obsession, because she/he knows he isn't gonna answer. Why is she/he still there waiting for her/him?...If she/he felt love, she/he would have answered, don't u think so?
Also a woman dont have to give many chances, because she can lose credibility, in case if it is a woman,
what u think? :-D

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Re: for you ........

Postby muruganji » Thu Sep 29, 2011 7:56 pm

Hi Lara

A woman only can understand the another woman's mind in the world

what is happening here?

Do you understand anything?

we can find the depth of the Ocean but we cannot find a woman's mind depth

what do you say

Here, Lara only should reply, I need

Others restricted and prohibited

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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Fri Sep 30, 2011 5:49 pm

suppose she /he is talking about dead one how she/he get the answer???????? but i agree with you tha woman should not give more than one chance

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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Fri Sep 30, 2011 5:51 pm

murgan
nice to see u around
let me tell u someting NO woman can undersrtand other woman belive me in that.

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Re: for you ........

Postby muruganji » Fri Sep 30, 2011 6:59 pm

the stupid girl is the girl who trust completly with a guy in my opinion

This statement has given by from someone among us

Heroes are invited to reply for this statement

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Re: for you ........

Postby Lara » Sat Oct 01, 2011 3:44 am

hi Muruganji! Have u heard this question: "who unerstands women??" what u think about this?
Sweets thanks i hadnt thought about dead, u r right :) c u :-D

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Re: for you ........

Postby shakespear » Sat Oct 01, 2011 1:51 pm

sweets wrote:i'll tell u the same words you told me before
hold the pen .....the words come by itself

have a sweet day




yeah i think u r right...i'll follow ur advice and hold the pen and try ...
thnx

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Re: for you ........

Postby muruganji » Sat Oct 01, 2011 7:19 pm

the stupid girl is the girl who trust completly with a guy in my opinion

Hi Lara

you knew who said that

I invited some guys here like heroes i considered to give counter reply

I think, This club has no heroes

All of you like rain, is falling in the desert, no use

No interesting from the guys

what do you say

Muruganji

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Re: for you ........

Postby Lara » Sat Oct 01, 2011 9:43 pm

[quote="muruganji"][color=#008000]the stupid girl is the girl who trust completly with a guy in my opinion[/color]

Hi muruganji!!!! Yes i know who wrote that phrase....but a "stupid girl" is the one who gives everything for a guy, and he doesnt answer her in the same way. (i understood what she said muruganji) Because we need confidence or trust in any relationship.
C U Friend

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Re: for you ........

Postby muruganji » Sun Oct 02, 2011 6:23 pm

He already passed away, How could he answer her. He was going almost to palestine to touch her but nature could not alllow him. It kept him itself. What to do?
For that we do not consider the life is came to an end. It is stupid thing.
we surprised his dream and the way he was going on.

he bought a house, he dumped everything for her and both of their children whether they were females are males.

He was highly influenced man here. If he was here the stupid girl who we know is here in India.

we do not know how is the love growthing in between both of them. But it all finished.

Tell the stupid girl, if she honouring his love, she must go in the positive path

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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Mon Oct 03, 2011 5:52 am

goodmorning both of you lara and murugan

it's not important to comment mistakes in our life wether we mean them or not but the most important to learn form them so my(stuipd girl) get her lesson well this time i alwas remind her that PAST IS PAST

i'll go on soon

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Re: for you ........

Postby muruganji » Mon Oct 03, 2011 4:13 pm

Good.

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