A woman's sorrow

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A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 06, 2011 12:01 pm

A woman's sorrow

How long do I have to wait?
To torture my self and blame?
I couldn't ignore you or hate
Fire inside my heart does flame
You are my love, my soul mate
All things to you seems the same
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All women, like me, are weak
You don't care for my bad fire
We always search love and seek
And we try to hide our ire
Come touch my skin, it's so sleek
I have lust, I have desire
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My life will not last forever
So come relax my mind
With you I feel in fever
Killing eyes, I'm like a hind
Show me your lust, don't cover
Like my charm, where will you find?
You will still my sweet lover
I loved, really love is blind
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You got your wish and you went
I dream with you, spend the nights
Our days will soon end, they're lent
So come dear and burn the lights
Your home is my heart, you rent
With me you'll get touching sights
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Did the bird find another nest?
So why does the dove coo alone?
For years, she looks towards the west
And hopes him stop her hard moan
She waits and waits, she does her best
None's on skyline, she won't leave groan
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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby sweets » Thu Oct 06, 2011 12:44 pm

my dear friend u alawys impress my thoughts heart and mind iwill post total comment when i back home cu

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 06, 2011 9:32 pm

hello
i'm waiting ur comment...
i hope u r very well....
regards
c u

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby Lara » Thu Oct 06, 2011 10:38 pm

shakespear wrote:You got your wish and you went
I dream with you, spend the nights
Our days will soon end, they're lent
So come dear and burn the lights
Your home is my heart, you rent
With me you'll get touching sights
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Did the bird find another nest?
So why does the dove coo alone?
For years, she looks towards the west
And hopes him stop her hard moan
She waits and waits, she does her best
None's on skyline, she won't leave groan
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Hi Shakespear!!! It's a wOnderful poem...well in the poem u r waiting for her, but it has been a long time, now u tells her what's happening, althoug u has spent much time you still have hope she responds...So i tell u that hope is the last thing we lose...so dont give up.
I loved this phrase : "Did the bird find another nest?" C U friend
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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 06, 2011 10:49 pm

hi friend
i think u reserved the meaning koz she is waiting him not he and i hope u find the mistake...c u and have nice day

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby Lara » Thu Oct 06, 2011 11:03 pm

shakespear wrote:You got your wish and you went


:!!: oops...yes im sorry for that..well in this case maybe she made a mistake...she gave all for him, and he just wanned pleasure, maybe he doesnt come back to her...and she will stay waiting and waiting, and i think all women realize when anyone wont come back, in this case this love is blind.

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 06, 2011 11:17 pm

hi
in the beginning u reversed the meaning but now u r talking very well.....but i meant by "love is blind " koz we love and don't know if our lovers good or bad and if they r bad we can hate them or ignore them and we still love them in spite of their hurt...
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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby Lara » Thu Oct 06, 2011 11:33 pm

hmm that's right...but when we really love and realize our love is bad the best thing we could do is to let him go and not to hate him..because if we continue with him it will be worst, and then the wound would be deeper {-:

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 06, 2011 11:46 pm

ok
real love...if we have real love so we can't leave our lover although he/she is bad...we'll close our eyes ...we can't see our lover's badness, we see just his softness and beauty...we can't stop loving him/her....i know we'd better leave him/her ...but...
could we??????

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby Lara » Thu Oct 06, 2011 11:58 pm

shakespear wrote:could we??????


hmmm maybe if she/he wanna change we may give her/him a chance..but if she/he doesnt get it so the last thing we can do is to let her/him go, it's what i think

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Fri Oct 07, 2011 12:09 am

ok
may be u can...but i can't really koz we'll be connected strongly..

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby Lara » Fri Oct 07, 2011 12:17 am

hmm yeah those our point of views, they r completely different :D and i respect urs :-D

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Fri Oct 07, 2011 12:53 am

ok
that is very well koz i respect ur idea also
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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Wed Oct 12, 2011 4:03 am

thanks to all my friends

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby sweets » Sun Oct 16, 2011 6:26 am

hi
it's the first time that you are talking in figure of woman it's so goood ,well as a respons for that i answered this poem with a poem in man's figure as an answer to ur lady ;-) ;-) i hope to read and enjoy with.........................................

My dear lady I'm here
Just look well
You only didn't me watch well

I'm here and there
I'm in everywhere
You are only what I see ..i hear and talk about
How you could not note that ????

How you could not note my eyes saving you from others
How you couldn't touch my warmth in cold days ??

Your bird did not leave your nest till now
But with your careless ..sure it'll do that
Instead of waiting look at here forget west
I'm not expecting ur best

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Sun Oct 16, 2011 11:15 am

hello
congratulations
u come back and we, ur friends all of us, r happy for ur coming back and we hope u show us lovely and new poems which always u used to show us...
in this poem u took a figure of man as i did in the my poem and i think we exchanged the roles ...i don't know but i think i'm feel pleased to play the role of woman and feel how the woman feels ...
sweets wrote:You only didn't me watch well

i think u'd better say: You only didn't watch me well
another thing :u got the subject befor the auxiliary read the following:
sweets wrote:How you could not note that ????

you needn;t do that and u can easily put the aux b4 the subject
another thing: u put preposition b4 adjective and this is wrong koz "careless" not noun its adjective...u have to use "carelessness" read the following:
sweets wrote:But with your careless ..sure it'll do that

any way ur poem is a reply to my poem and u inspired me to write another one in the same style ..u encouraged me
ur poem is full of valuable words which have deep meanings and i hope i read anothre poem like this lovely poem
congratulations twice for ur coming back and for this poem
have nice moments

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby sweets » Sun Oct 16, 2011 11:59 am

thanx 4 correcting my mistakes in fact i wrote it this morning b4 going 2 work anyway thank u so much*

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Tue Oct 18, 2011 5:04 am

hi sweets
really i regreted correcting ur mistakes koz i thought u would be angry and i had to make private msg and informed u about ur mistakes...anyway i hope u r not angry for this fault and plz accept my apology my friend...
i ask u to issue it in saparated topic ..i meant new topic after correct it ....plz examine it and correct then issue it in new topic
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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby sweets » Tue Oct 18, 2011 7:23 pm

why shall i do that ???????????? you know my opinon about corrections and so on and we disscused that more than one time .......
anyway next poem i promise to be more carefull
but if i post this as new post i'll post as it's without any simple correction is it fine ??
so shall i wait a reply to my reply or u'll write new thing ???????????????????


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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby shakespear » Tue Oct 18, 2011 10:13 pm

hi
ok do wtever u like and dont worry about that
feel free plz
thnx 4 this comment

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Re: A woman's sorrow

Postby sweets » Thu Oct 20, 2011 5:25 am

sure i'll feel free

havea sweet day


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