AN ANGEL ON EARTH

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AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Mon Sep 12, 2011 9:43 pm

AN ANGEL ON EARTH

What a lovely face shinning with youth
What sensitive depths of charming smile
What a holy beauty, I live in its truth
An angel brought me to a burning pile
I loved her since I met her in the booth
My love increased after I read her file
………………………………………………..(1)
"Mention me" she said "if you like me a lot"
"And say a lovely poem on our story"
"Let me feel your love, do you care or not?"
"Add me to the high state of the glory"
"Keep me close, no water the rose will rot"
I've mentioned you and I won't be sorry
………………………………………………………….(2)
Wake or sleep I say your name every time
You coddle me and call me with alias name
"Sweetie" and other names, all have that chime
And I coddle you, I always do the same
Angel You took me back to my past prime
Your love gave me happiness, and gave me fame
…………………………………………………………….(3)
A mole on a rosy cheek stole my mind
And put me in a puzzlement, that faint mole
Red berry on lips and neck of a hind
Your Eyes are as pearls, they relax my tired soul
On your cheeks I read holy words and find
When can I reach my desire and my goal?
………………………………………………………….(4)
You asked me to say your name in my poem
Can't you find out your name? I've just said it
For your sake, I'm ready to leave my home
And follow you, to enjoy your soft wit
To Lima of Peru or even to Rome
Save you to me, and all things can not fit
………………………………………………………………(5)

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby sweets » Tue Sep 13, 2011 5:06 am

dear freind

you are in love no doubt about that {-: {-: {-: you know i'm so happy for you do you know why ????? because this love made a strong transition form sadness and glomy ideas to sun to shine and let open your arms to life again as if your alive again . how i know that ?? just compare bwtween old and new poems and see the differance {-;

[color=#BF0000]really love do mericals


i really hope that this love make u shiny 4ever

it's nice ..soft poem i like it

have sweety day

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 13, 2011 9:37 pm

thnx sweets 4 this comment and i hope hear sth new from u
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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby Lara » Tue Sep 13, 2011 9:43 pm

shakespear wrote:"Keep me close, no water the rose will rot"

when i read the poem, I loved this phrase

Shakespear! What a nice poem
Someone who is really in love, leaves anything to be with his/her love, and it seems you are, then do not give up and fight for that love, c u :)

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 13, 2011 10:17 pm

thnx
we all have 2 fight for our love's sake and we don't have 2 stop or feel defeated koz if we fell once we must stand thousand times
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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby Lara » Tue Sep 13, 2011 10:25 pm

That's right friend :)

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Wed Sep 14, 2011 1:50 am

thnx friend

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby sweets » Wed Sep 14, 2011 4:14 am

shakespear wrote:thnx sweets 4 this comment and i hope hear sth new from u
have nice day



well i cought some ideas ......and collected words form here and there ..... lines wrote lines easre

but nothing complete yet

have sweetday

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Wed Sep 14, 2011 8:06 am

ok let's see ur new poem ...really we all hope u not stop writing koz u r good poetess
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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby sweets » Wed Sep 14, 2011 5:09 pm

maybe 'll post next week but do not expect much

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Thu Sep 15, 2011 8:52 am

hi friend i am sure u can make much so i won't expect ...i'm sure u'll make much
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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 13, 2011 11:24 pm

sweets wrote:maybe 'll post next week but do not expect much


u promised ....so where is ur post????

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 13, 2011 11:53 pm

shakespear wrote:AN ANGEL ON EARTH

"Mention me" she said "if you like me a lot"
"And say a lovely poem on our story"
"Let me feel your love, do you care or not?"
"Add me to the high state of the glory"
"Keep me close, no water the rose will rot"
I've mentioned you and I won't be sorry


what means this??????????????????

think carefully plz...............

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby Lara » Fri Oct 14, 2011 4:09 am

Hi again Shakespear!!!
hmmm....I think as she said "no water the rose will rot", she depends on u, perhaps u have in ur hands her heart, it depends on u, she depends on u. Also she said :"Let me feel your love, do you care or not?" here, i think she also wanna have ur heart, but that is up to you.
Am i right? :~: C U

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Mon Oct 17, 2011 5:03 am

listen
she asked to mention her ..this is in the first line..."Mention me" she said "if you like me a lot"
in the last line i said...I've mentioned you and I won't be sorry
sorry wt means that??????????????????

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby Lara » Tue Oct 18, 2011 3:00 am

humm i thing i didnt get what u meant, but i'll try again... :roll:
Well in this case she wanned a proof, she needed a proof that you love her, that's why she asked that, and this is a nice proof of love that anyone can do for his/her beloved. But i think it's not neccesary that anyone asks his/her beloved to write a poem, because if his/her beloved loves her/him so much, it's his duty to write one, without asking it.

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Tue Oct 18, 2011 4:11 am

hi
u ddn't get it again
in last line i confirmed that i mentioned her name so discover where i had mentioned her...

:-D can u?

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby Lara » Tue Oct 18, 2011 5:38 pm

hmmmm... :roll: the only word which is a name is "Angel", yes the name u mentioned is Angel. I hope to be right...like the Robbie Willians song; "Angels" :-D

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby sweets » Tue Oct 18, 2011 7:19 pm

lara did you his angel or not yet????????????????????????

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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby shakespear » Tue Oct 18, 2011 10:32 pm

i mentioned another name and its the same but another word...
ok dont worry about that...
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Re: AN ANGEL ON EARTH

Postby Lara » Wed Oct 19, 2011 2:43 am

Shakes...I almost guess it,,,sure in the next one i will... :lol:

Hi Sweets :-D ....sorry sis, but i didnt get ur question, c u :)


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