My dear lady I'm here
Just look well
You only didn't watch me well
I'm here and there
I'm in everywhere
You are only what I see ..i hear and talk about
How you could not note that ????
How you could not note my eyes saving you from others
How you couldn't touch my warmth in cold days ??
Your bird did not leave your nest till now
But with your carelessness ..sure it'll do that
Instead of waiting look at here forget west
I'm not expecting ur best
an answer for ( A woman's sorrow)
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Re: warning
i didn't guess wt u meant by this word (sure) koz u have here use adverb(surely) not adj ...or u meant sth else and ur intention is(i'm sure it'll do that) so u omitted (i'm) and keep adj refereing to the rest of the sentence...sweets wrote:..sure it'll do that
any way ; u didn't correct mistakes and i greet u here to ur courage that u dont care to anyone and keep ur origin although it has mistakes but i hope u notice that u put pronoun(you) before (could) in the question sentence...any way....
u r so bold and u remind me of the rich club in its beginning when it was so rich with poems and essays and other things
go ahead and let's read more and more my loyal friend...
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well the mistake u talked about was by accident (you know i do not revise my writes what ever happen) it suppose to be sure i'll do thatshakespear wrote:i didn't guess wt u meant by this word (sure) koz u have here use adverb(surely) not adj ...or u meant sth else and ur intention is(i'm sure it'll do that) so u omitted (i'm) and keep adj refereing to the rest of the sentence...sweets wrote:..sure it'll do that
any way ; u didn't correct mistakes and i greet u here to ur courage that u dont care to anyone and keep ur origin although it has mistakes but i hope u notice that u put pronoun(you) before (could) in the question sentence...any way....
u r so bold and u remind me of the rich club in its beginning when it was so rich with poems and essays and other things
go ahead and let's read more and more my loyal friend...
thanx for being my corrector here
why u were not online today??
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hola
u r welcome and i hope u r ok
really i came here this morning and commented some poems....
have nice moments
u r welcome and i hope u r ok
really i came here this morning and commented some poems....
have nice moments
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well u know nothing perfect but thanx to Allah for everything
have a sweetday
have a sweetday
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hi sweets
show me something else i wana read new issue from u so plz work hard to show us ur great work...
have nice moments...
show me something else i wana read new issue from u so plz work hard to show us ur great work...
have nice moments...
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i was just waiting for u to show up (: (:
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hi
ok i really started in new poem and i dont know i can't finish it....
ok we have to race me and u
have nice days
ok i really started in new poem and i dont know i can't finish it....
ok we have to race me and u
have nice days
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as u like it's a raccce shaki
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hi
i think u'll win in this race koz i dont have desire to finish it...i dont know y? but i feel i cant finish it...may be i need much time...i wrote just 12 lines and it needs more than these lines...anyway i'll try to finish it
have nice moments
i think u'll win in this race koz i dont have desire to finish it...i dont know y? but i feel i cant finish it...may be i need much time...i wrote just 12 lines and it needs more than these lines...anyway i'll try to finish it
have nice moments
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in fact i did not write any single line till this moment so i guess u'll win this race not me
anway where ur disappear ?????????
anway where ur disappear ?????????
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hi
i think u have to think about the title and idea then start writing on topic ...may b i am now going past u but who knows? may be u'll go past me and at the end u win..none knows...
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i think u have to think about the title and idea then start writing on topic ...may b i am now going past u but who knows? may be u'll go past me and at the end u win..none knows...
have nice moments
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in fact i'm so busy nowadays to think about anything so maybe when i be free i'll do ut u knw me i can write and post in 2 hours only :) :)
have nice day
have nice day