A Poor Brother feelings

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A Poor Brother feelings

Postby muruganji » Thu Nov 24, 2011 5:32 pm

Hi Golden Moon ( Full Moon)
I wish to break you and
make golden ornaments
for my sister..

Hi all small stars...
I wish to break all of you
and make diamond ornaments
for my sister....

I am seeing, there is a female doll
inside a textile shop
It is wearing a saree (Indian Traditional Female Dress)

So, I wish to buy for you ( My sister)
but there is no money in my pocket
tears are coming out from my eyes
still I am standing outside of the shop
with sad feelings......

I will live as her eyes
then i will make safest life for her

And I will in starvation to save some money
for her marriage
Her Marriage music must hear at the earliest

How is it?

Murugan

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby sweets » Wed Nov 30, 2011 5:51 am

it really good that u have such feelings to ur sister i'm sure that she excused & forgive u just try to be in touch with here

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby muruganji » Wed Nov 30, 2011 3:02 pm

EN + O

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby muruganji » Wed Nov 30, 2011 5:31 pm

Dear God

If it is really good, why the other members did not appreciate? except my sister.

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby sweets » Fri Dec 02, 2011 10:06 am

hi u should not be upset so much look how many views u had 116 that's amazing number :)

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby muruganji » Fri Dec 02, 2011 5:38 pm

Dear God

My sister convinced me as below

hi u should not be upset so much look how many views u had 116 that's amazing number :)

I am really glad, but According to me, My sister understood my feelings and she likes too my lines

Although She likes, everybody should know, the elder brother's feelings, how he is loving as a brother, on his only sister and how he has huge response for her as a elder brother.That is my wish.

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby sweets » Sat Dec 03, 2011 5:15 am

nice speech :)

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby muruganji » Sat Dec 03, 2011 4:40 pm

Dear God

please ask her and tell me which line or lines she likes too

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby sweets » Sun Dec 04, 2011 5:34 pm

"I will live as her eyes"

"i Golden Moon ( Full Moon)
I wish to break you and
make golden ornaments
for my sister..

Hi all small stars...
I wish to break all of you
and make diamond ornaments
for my sister...."

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby muruganji » Mon Dec 05, 2011 6:24 pm

Thanks

Dear God

Do you know, is my sister working? and is she responsible girl to her family?

why am I asking you? I can't see her as before easily.

Now her replying time is changed

Thus, I ask you.

Please investigate and tell me

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby sweets » Tue Dec 06, 2011 7:05 pm

just read the message
takecare

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby shakespear » Sat Dec 10, 2011 7:33 am

I am seeing, there is a female doll

the verb "see" from the sensation verbs so it doesn't come in continuous present tense and instead of that it occures in simple present

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby muruganji » Mon Dec 12, 2011 6:32 pm

Dear Shakes

This is great time I had you know
Because you respond to my odd

I considered already you do not know, you are the great in this forum and in this club.

So, I am in pleasure and to my eyes, this mistakes is not a important.

Why?

You responded.

That's enough to me

Where are your other friends?
tell them to come here

Please forgive me if already I wounded your heart


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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby shakespear » Mon Dec 12, 2011 9:29 pm

dear friend
u r welcome and don't mention plz ...we have to forget the past and throw it behind us and not to look at it again...
thnx 4 ur kind words
have good luck

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Re: A Poor Brother feelings

Postby sweets » Thu Dec 15, 2011 6:32 pm

i'm glade to hear that past is past between you :) :)


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