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(Shakespeare always asks me to hold a pen as first step .....so this is what i got)

what to say ..what to write ..what to tell ...

i lose the whole sense !!!!! sense of life ...time ...passion

people say I'm cold like ice how can i deny!!! but they do not know why ...
just wanna talk talk and talk......just talk

my soul is like broken mirror how to collect...my heart is broken how to mend ...my body is tired how o rest............

they are here just to watch without support no one mend or even try to collect they just wanna the end ......... waiting that ice to melt and catch the gift !!!!

who I'm i asked myself once ???? am i a butterfly flying next light waiting to die or like a tree in storm refusing the death??????


who I'm ???am i that passion lover who ready to give everything??? or playful one who likes to hurt all burn all likes revenge??????????


what to say...what to tell.......

I live puzzle and can't find the end !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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hi
although ur writing is prose, not metrical, but i think it touches the heart and it so nice....it enters the hearts without asking permission koz it flows from inside ur heart.....i can't say anything more koz i have no words to come close to ur great expressions and ur fantastic words........if u just say the title .......i think it's enough to be a good work.......so i think u have the ability to write great writing easily.....
my regards....
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so no grammatical mistakes !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hoooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry

happy that u like it

have a sweet day
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طبع الكرى فوق الجفون ذبولا فاراك منها صارما مسلولا
تهوى الوصال وقد تريك تمنعا فاسلك لقلب الفاتنات سبيلا
ان الهوى صعب وان مارسته مارست فيه الضم والتقبيلا
its in arabic and i know u'll understand it.....thnx
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no comment and i'm sure u know why
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hello........
i don't know
i tried to understand my self but i think its so hard so how can i understand the ppl round me...its more diffuclt
broken mirror...represents our tired souls which can't reflect wt we face in this world
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what can i say only you are very good , frankly you are playing by words readily, and the best thing i like in this poem rich vocabulary , i was useful about it and i have found stiffness to understand this poem Coz you put difficult words for me, but that good to give me ability to improve my english and try to develop it.
i'll say it agian it's wonderful poem and i hope to you all best and all wishes.
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thanx momalanmol
be urself
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broken mirror has a touch to souls....so it's large title...if one can make good poem about this title...
our life is like a night mare
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i'll try
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where's the fragrant of that lovely flower...is it lost??? where are the fragments of your soul? where's the fatigue of your body? where's the fractions or your mirror?? can't all these things give you inspiration to write millions or lines....can't????
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i can't i'm frozen for long long long time
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i know wt r u talking about so i'm not amazed....koz i'm like u, have frozen soul...maybe have dying soul....smtimes i feel afraid when i about to catch the pencil or hold it to write poem...but at least u can try hoping u'll give us inspiration....
this site was so crowded with readers and writers but now....better to be silent...
let's read again..
i'm waiting
our life is like a night mare
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