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save me!

Postby angelodite » Tue Dec 10, 2013 5:19 am


I couldnt remember how did I get here. Why do you look at me? How can I get here? who are you? Why are you smiling at me?

I was playing at my cute fluffy dog that afternoon. We were played catch and run. Running and laughing together. And somehow, I heard a whispered from somewhere, come I ignored it, I thought it might be the wind, it was windy at that time. After a while, the voice came again, louder, ”come“ then with my dog, I tried to find the voice.. my dog was afraid, he is barking all the time.

Then, I arrived in an old house beside my house, "I never see this house before" this house has this unique european style, almost like a castle, simple castle. It has a very huge gate with a light on each side. It was mysterious and beautiful..

I come inside, "Anyone inside?", noone answer, wind whispering... I keep walking, my dog were beside me, shivering. I arrived in the living room, "wow.." it remind me of one of the harry potter movie, while they were eating in a big hall.

Then I saw this one very white sculpture, "The aphrodite" it was placed in the middle of the living room. It looks so real, almost like human, its... beautiful.. Then suddenly it's eyes..!

"Ah.. I remembered now!" I was the aphorodite now, and it was me who look at me.. "I want to get out" I cannot yell! even move!

"Help me! save me!" (I was just smiling seeing the aphrodite start to crying...)

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Re: save me!

Postby tamerali » Mon Dec 16, 2013 11:08 pm

Nice story
There is a great and universal story called Pygmalion, it revolves around a sculptor who created a very beautiful statue, he loved it and asked the God to transform his statue to a girl, and the God accepted his request.
What was the result?
The girl lost her beauty, and the big shock was that she did not love her creator, she loved his servant.
The sculptor decided to kill her at the end.
Again, nice story
Thank you

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Re: save me!

Postby angelodite » Tue Dec 17, 2013 2:55 am

Thanks, anyway I am a new comer in this forum. I know my writing still far far away from excellence, but I love writing! :lol:

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Re: save me!

Postby shakespear » Tue Feb 25, 2014 12:35 pm

we can't reach excellence but at least we try to reach...human will be far away from excellence....i think ur story is very well...go ahead
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Re: save me!

Postby untaught » Fri Aug 01, 2014 12:58 am

It's nice.
Did someone come to save you? {-;

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