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A ROSE & A HELL

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Wed May 07, 2014 5:18 pm

Hello
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu May 08, 2014 7:13 am

dreamer wrote:no words to say
no games to play
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

hi farah:
did u mean these 2 lines?? ok may be u r r8 but the poet can do what others can't..this called in literature" poetic license" ...any way it's ur opinioin
but my opinion is: we have to write and write whatever comes to our mind...we have to translate our ideas to lines of poems...and show the other what we want to say in poetic writing...
dear friend dreamer:
i think u r able to write wtever u want...u can make all ur speech poetry... really i think u r the best in this club....koz u have soft sense
finally: thanks farah to show ur comment frankly
........... thanks dreamer to accept all opinion and comments
.......... thanks all my friends in this club to edure my long comments


all have nice moments.........warm kisses
our life is like a night mare

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Thu May 08, 2014 9:25 pm

Waw.. How can this happen? If you agree I am not agree. But thank you to teach us the term(poetic licens) SHKIE... Have sweet dream my s......... FRIEND
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Fri May 09, 2014 7:58 am

well it's not a matter to agree or not it's just we post what's going in ur mind at this moment

u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah


cu around and waiting to share us in our game
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Fri May 09, 2014 5:32 pm

Hi farsh.. We all respect ur opinion but in return we wish others respect our opinions,
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Mon May 12, 2014 10:45 am

Hi shakie... Thank you... I respect your opinion...bye my lovely friends
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Sun May 25, 2014 7:34 am

Hi farah.. Thnx
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby Olagora » Thu Apr 09, 2015 5:42 am

it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Mon Jan 04, 2016 5:59 pm

Wooow still remmber ur role well let me think about something
be urself

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:03 pm

as u like but i like to hear and read from u new poem
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:06 pm

shakespear wrote:A ROSE & A HELL

Who listens to infants or cares for plants?
Who defends them, defends their sad mothers?
Who feels for them, feels for the tearful chants?
All denied, you have no friends, no brothers
………………………………………………………………………. (1)
Who will say " HAPPY RETURNS" again?
Who will give us cards and sweets at Bairam?
Who will wipe puzzled tears, and erase sore pain?
We all please the hope, cling to a fine tram
………………………………………………………………………. (2)
Clashes and shelling, are all day and night
Scattered limbs are spread so high in the sky
The mothers are still waiting for the knight
The saver will come and erase the sigh
………………………………………………………………………. (3)
Moving from place to place, I try to escape
During the night's silence, dull hours pass
And other foul bombs break the calm, and rape..
Our quiet, our souls, and kill the so fair lass
………………………………………………………………………. (4)
A grisly tyrant became our bad fate
Allied with Satan to kill more and more
He's thirsty to blood and he wants to sate
Who stops him? our happy life turned sore
………………………………………………………………………. (5)
An awful missile fell on my garden
Ruined my white flowers, destroyed the beauty
Broke the green branches, it aims to sadden
Happy beings, really you're so potty
………………………………………………………………………. (6)
Under the debris, I found a soft rose
It was still dewy, It was still alive
My lass, I need you to revive and dose..
The rose, what a pity! the charm will rive
………………………………………………………………………. (7)
When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
………………………………………………………………………. (8)


i hope you enjoy reading my new poem
have nice moments


what line u like in this poem????
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:26 pm

Whole stanza number 4
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:28 pm

koz it represents wt u lived in fact...r8???
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:31 pm

So right
be urself

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:56 am

i supposed that....read it again and show me my mistakes please
our life is like a night mare


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