A ROSE & A HELL
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A ROSE & A HELL
A ROSE & A HELL
Who listens to infants or cares for plants?
Who defends them, defends their sad mothers?
Who feels for them, feels for the tearful chants?
All denied, you have no friends, no brothers
………………………………………………………………………. (1)
Who will say " HAPPY RETURNS" again?
Who will give us cards and sweets at Bairam?
Who will wipe puzzled tears, and erase sore pain?
We all please the hope, cling to a fine tram
………………………………………………………………………. (2)
Clashes and shelling, are all day and night
Scattered limbs are spread so high in the sky
The mothers are still waiting for the knight
The saver will come and erase the sigh
………………………………………………………………………. (3)
Moving from place to place, I try to escape
During the night's silence, dull hours pass
And other foul bombs break the calm, and rape..
Our quiet, our souls, and kill the so fair lass
………………………………………………………………………. (4)
A grisly tyrant became our bad fate
Allied with Satan to kill more and more
He's thirsty to blood and he wants to sate
Who stops him? our happy life turned sore
………………………………………………………………………. (5)
An awful missile fell on my garden
Ruined my white flowers, destroyed the beauty
Broke the green branches, it aims to sadden
Happy beings, really you're so potty
………………………………………………………………………. (6)
Under the debris, I found a soft rose
It was still dewy, It was still alive
My lass, I need you to revive and dose..
The rose, what a pity! the charm will rive
………………………………………………………………………. (7)
When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
………………………………………………………………………. (8)
i hope you enjoy reading my new poem
have nice moments
Who listens to infants or cares for plants?
Who defends them, defends their sad mothers?
Who feels for them, feels for the tearful chants?
All denied, you have no friends, no brothers
………………………………………………………………………. (1)
Who will say " HAPPY RETURNS" again?
Who will give us cards and sweets at Bairam?
Who will wipe puzzled tears, and erase sore pain?
We all please the hope, cling to a fine tram
………………………………………………………………………. (2)
Clashes and shelling, are all day and night
Scattered limbs are spread so high in the sky
The mothers are still waiting for the knight
The saver will come and erase the sigh
………………………………………………………………………. (3)
Moving from place to place, I try to escape
During the night's silence, dull hours pass
And other foul bombs break the calm, and rape..
Our quiet, our souls, and kill the so fair lass
………………………………………………………………………. (4)
A grisly tyrant became our bad fate
Allied with Satan to kill more and more
He's thirsty to blood and he wants to sate
Who stops him? our happy life turned sore
………………………………………………………………………. (5)
An awful missile fell on my garden
Ruined my white flowers, destroyed the beauty
Broke the green branches, it aims to sadden
Happy beings, really you're so potty
………………………………………………………………………. (6)
Under the debris, I found a soft rose
It was still dewy, It was still alive
My lass, I need you to revive and dose..
The rose, what a pity! the charm will rive
………………………………………………………………………. (7)
When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
………………………………………………………………………. (8)
i hope you enjoy reading my new poem
have nice moments
our life is like a night mare
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I am coming back from a very interesting travel through a troubled land and I have seen as a rose can grow among the ruins.
We don’t have to lose the hope. Very deep poem. Compliments!
I send to you my human friendly warmth.
We don’t have to lose the hope. Very deep poem. Compliments!
I send to you my human friendly warmth.
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hi
thanks 4 this warmth msg ...yes u caught the aim of this poem....that ; whatever happened there's still a hope ..here the rose represents the hope, the beauty & debris represents destroy, war, death
thnx 4 being the 1st one to comment on this poem and i hope u catch the mistakes of my poem
have nice moments
thanks 4 this warmth msg ...yes u caught the aim of this poem....that ; whatever happened there's still a hope ..here the rose represents the hope, the beauty & debris represents destroy, war, death
thnx 4 being the 1st one to comment on this poem and i hope u catch the mistakes of my poem
have nice moments
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for me it's not ur best
i knw how u suffering i lived such situation before but u can draw this paint in better shape not as report
u tried to have little hope but i guess it's fake one but at least realistic one
don't be angry cuz i annoyed u but i feel little depressed nowadays
i knw how u suffering i lived such situation before but u can draw this paint in better shape not as report
u tried to have little hope but i guess it's fake one but at least realistic one
don't be angry cuz i annoyed u but i feel little depressed nowadays
be urself
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hi
thnx 4 ur comment and i'm not angry and u can speak what u like...but as u know there are two kinds of tales; descriptive and narrative....i tried here to convey my suffering through this poem and show to ppl what's going on in my province, in my town, in my place..
war means destroying, damage, death, deprivation...and unjust rulers, tyrant, who make this war. also i tried here that there is hope, beam in all conditions even in bad condition...there is still a hope and we must care for it to keep it safe...hope like a rose we've to treat, nurse it and care for it to keep it alive
i know it's not my best poem and i'm not angry and i thank u for ur comment
have nice moments
c u soon
thnx 4 ur comment and i'm not angry and u can speak what u like...but as u know there are two kinds of tales; descriptive and narrative....i tried here to convey my suffering through this poem and show to ppl what's going on in my province, in my town, in my place..
war means destroying, damage, death, deprivation...and unjust rulers, tyrant, who make this war. also i tried here that there is hope, beam in all conditions even in bad condition...there is still a hope and we must care for it to keep it safe...hope like a rose we've to treat, nurse it and care for it to keep it alive
i know it's not my best poem and i'm not angry and i thank u for ur comment
have nice moments
c u soon
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dear dreamer
depression means that there're sth inside u, i know u have lots to show, u can write creative poetry koz of ur suffering....u r still waiting a miracle to happen...live ur life and try to write whatever come in ur mind...
depression means that there're sth inside u, i know u have lots to show, u can write creative poetry koz of ur suffering....u r still waiting a miracle to happen...live ur life and try to write whatever come in ur mind...
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Hello shakespear
I think it is very lovely poem. It is descriptive poem. It shows events that happened in your country. It is considered as a document.
see you soom
I think it is very lovely poem. It is descriptive poem. It shows events that happened in your country. It is considered as a document.
see you soom
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hi farah
thnx 4 this comment..sorry if i was late to reply u...yes u'r r8 it's considered as a document..also there's sth...i referred in it that we have to keep our hope and nurse it koz its like a white rose..
thnx again 4 the comment
c u
thnx 4 this comment..sorry if i was late to reply u...yes u'r r8 it's considered as a document..also there's sth...i referred in it that we have to keep our hope and nurse it koz its like a white rose..
thnx again 4 the comment
c u
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hi Shakespear
you are welcome
really it is very good poem
don't care about comments that say it is not very good, i loved the last section
see you soon
you are welcome
really it is very good poem
don't care about comments that say it is not very good, i loved the last section
do not stop writing Shakespearshakespear wrote:When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
see you soon
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hi friend
i also like the last stanza...it's about emotion...we can't live without emotion...
thnx 4 ur comment...i want to read sth from u..i think u r able to write a poem if u try...we can help each other...
thnx again
i also like the last stanza...it's about emotion...we can't live without emotion...
thnx 4 ur comment...i want to read sth from u..i think u r able to write a poem if u try...we can help each other...
thnx again
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i'm expecting better poem next time i mean that
you can start with this line
if i were you and u were me
waiting for ur line
you can start with this line
if i were you and u were me
waiting for ur line
be urself
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hello
ok ur line starts as the following:
if i were u and u were me
i use ur eyes, by my eyes u'll see
i touch ur chest feeling ur heart's beat
when i look to my face our eyes meet
complete plz...........................
ok ur line starts as the following:
if i were u and u were me
i use ur eyes, by my eyes u'll see
i touch ur chest feeling ur heart's beat
when i look to my face our eyes meet
complete plz...........................
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if i were u and u were me
u'll see how i feel
without u how can i feel
ur my half even if we won't meet
ur trun
u'll see how i feel
without u how can i feel
ur my half even if we won't meet
ur trun
be urself
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If i were u and u were me
u would know and u would see
how pain'd hurt my soft soul
u will still my lofty goal
if i were u, i'd kiss my hand
if u were me, u'd get my land
ur turn
u would know and u would see
how pain'd hurt my soft soul
u will still my lofty goal
if i were u, i'd kiss my hand
if u were me, u'd get my land
ur turn
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Hi
you and Dreamrer will have a good porm, but:
Whose this poem will be? You or Dreamer?
No fight, ok?
:-P:-D
SEE YOU
you and Dreamrer will have a good porm, but:
Whose this poem will be? You or Dreamer?
No fight, ok?

SEE YOU
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if i were u and u were me
u would know how pain i could cause
so staying away is better for u
if i were u and u were me
u would know powerful i'm i
how i can break hearts easily with no lose ,,
if i were u and u were me
u'll see that staying away from u is mercy from me
u would know how pain i could cause
so staying away is better for u
if i were u and u were me
u would know powerful i'm i
how i can break hearts easily with no lose ,,
if i were u and u were me
u'll see that staying away from u is mercy from me
be urself
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Hi farah.
We won't argue about the poem
thnx 4 ur comment
We won't argue about the poem
thnx 4 ur comment
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If I were you, and you were me
We'd live special life and we'd be
Happy creatures and we could see
Pretty sky and so pretty sea
........
If I were you, I'd nurse myself
That I still think by my real brain
I'd take me far from any elf
To my lover's chest, in a lane
..........
If you were me, you'd live torture
That I loved you or I loved me
I you, you me, we're sole creature
Am I your slave? Or we are free?
.........
If you were me, you'd have desire
You'd sense and feel my hot passion
You'd sense heat inside me and fire
If you were me, I'd get my ration
.........
ur turn
We'd live special life and we'd be
Happy creatures and we could see
Pretty sky and so pretty sea
........
If I were you, I'd nurse myself
That I still think by my real brain
I'd take me far from any elf
To my lover's chest, in a lane
..........
If you were me, you'd live torture
That I loved you or I loved me
I you, you me, we're sole creature
Am I your slave? Or we are free?
.........
If you were me, you'd have desire
You'd sense and feel my hot passion
You'd sense heat inside me and fire
If you were me, I'd get my ration
.........
ur turn
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if i were you and u were me
u'll feel what i live
heart says yes .. mind says no
if u were me u'll live in big trouble
if i were i would wake up
and have new love with new dream
no need to live past no need to cry
no need to wake past ..
let it pass
u'll feel what i live
heart says yes .. mind says no
if u were me u'll live in big trouble
if i were i would wake up
and have new love with new dream
no need to live past no need to cry
no need to wake past ..
let it pass
be urself
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hi
icant go on kox now my heart feels sad...y i feel ur tears rising in ur eyes, r they?
y i cause sadness 2 u & 2 myslf...u won in the poem....i wana u win....koz i u & u me , its mess
icant go on kox now my heart feels sad...y i feel ur tears rising in ur eyes, r they?
y i cause sadness 2 u & 2 myslf...u won in the poem....i wana u win....koz i u & u me , its mess
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it's not a battle to have winner in
i just wanna re-live my talent as we were remmber shaki?? those sweet mad days
sorry if i hurt u but as u said iu & u me
i just wanna re-live my talent as we were remmber shaki?? those sweet mad days
sorry if i hurt u but as u said iu & u me
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Is it hard 2 find kind heart now a days? 4 me its not koz i hv my dearest & u kno that
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it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search
be urself
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God granted me so sweet , educated ..sweets & that's enough.
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If she vanishing, im vanishing 2.... U kno, she's full of sweets
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I use mobile with hacking so its weak...nothing make me busy on u
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start with this word:
when....
when can my cheek lay on ur cheek?
when can my lips touch ur lips?
when can my hand confound in ur hair?
comb it and temper ur neck?
is it possible or it's no way?
ur turn
when....
when can my cheek lay on ur cheek?
when can my lips touch ur lips?
when can my hand confound in ur hair?
comb it and temper ur neck?
is it possible or it's no way?
ur turn
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when can i meet u, and look into ur eyes?
when can i take u, and take u to my chest?
when can my chest touch urs? feel ur heat?
when my hopes come true and live in ur paradise?
million " when" but none can be fact...
ur turn
when can i take u, and take u to my chest?
when can my chest touch urs? feel ur heat?
when my hopes come true and live in ur paradise?
million " when" but none can be fact...
ur turn
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when will the bright star visit me?
when will my lover mercy my heart?
when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?
ur turn
when will my lover mercy my heart?
when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?
ur turn
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I like these two lines. What did you mean with these two lines??shakespear wrote:when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?
Please check your inbox.
I am waiting.
Good night.
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mmm ok listen;
florid tree refers to fortile female, when delicious fruit refers to sin or refers to forbidden fruit of Adam in paradise...when he eats that fruit feels of his nakedness..i think u know the tale...
thnx 4 ur comment and i'll check my inbox..
gd nyt
florid tree refers to fortile female, when delicious fruit refers to sin or refers to forbidden fruit of Adam in paradise...when he eats that fruit feels of his nakedness..i think u know the tale...
thnx 4 ur comment and i'll check my inbox..
gd nyt
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i think it's " combine" my teacher...don't worry i got it...
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?
good morning all my friends
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?
good morning all my friends
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when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile
when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile
when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u
be urself
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i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs
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come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page
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i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty
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in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly
thnx
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly
thnx
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Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?
Thanks. I wait your coment.
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?
Thanks. I wait your coment.
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hello farah:farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?
really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
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hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:
you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...
i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...
i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
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Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
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really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poemshakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON
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ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
do i only feel sad ?
have nice moments...
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mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.
hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............
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Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning
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Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?
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Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?
Will you really go far away?
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No words to say
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all
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no words to say
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play
what do you think about
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play
what do you think about
be urself
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Hello
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea
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hi farah:dreamer wrote:no words to say
no games to play
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play
did u mean these 2 lines?? ok may be u r r8 but the poet can do what others can't..this called in literature" poetic license" ...any way it's ur opinioin
but my opinion is: we have to write and write whatever comes to our mind...we have to translate our ideas to lines of poems...and show the other what we want to say in poetic writing...
dear friend dreamer:
i think u r able to write wtever u want...u can make all ur speech poetry... really i think u r the best in this club....koz u have soft sense
finally: thanks farah to show ur comment frankly
........... thanks dreamer to accept all opinion and comments
.......... thanks all my friends in this club to edure my long comments
all have nice moments.........warm kisses
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Waw.. How can this happen? If you agree I am not agree. But thank you to teach us the term(poetic licens) SHKIE... Have sweet dream my s......... FRIEND
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well it's not a matter to agree or not it's just we post what's going in ur mind at this moment
u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah
cu around and waiting to share us in our game
u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah
cu around and waiting to share us in our game
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Hi farsh.. We all respect ur opinion but in return we wish others respect our opinions,
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day
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Hi shakie... Thank you... I respect your opinion...bye my lovely friends
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Hi farah.. Thnx
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...
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it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search
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as u like but i like to hear and read from u new poem
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what line u like in this poem????shakespear wrote:A ROSE & A HELL
Who listens to infants or cares for plants?
Who defends them, defends their sad mothers?
Who feels for them, feels for the tearful chants?
All denied, you have no friends, no brothers
………………………………………………………………………. (1)
Who will say " HAPPY RETURNS" again?
Who will give us cards and sweets at Bairam?
Who will wipe puzzled tears, and erase sore pain?
We all please the hope, cling to a fine tram
………………………………………………………………………. (2)
Clashes and shelling, are all day and night
Scattered limbs are spread so high in the sky
The mothers are still waiting for the knight
The saver will come and erase the sigh
………………………………………………………………………. (3)
Moving from place to place, I try to escape
During the night's silence, dull hours pass
And other foul bombs break the calm, and rape..
Our quiet, our souls, and kill the so fair lass
………………………………………………………………………. (4)
A grisly tyrant became our bad fate
Allied with Satan to kill more and more
He's thirsty to blood and he wants to sate
Who stops him? our happy life turned sore
………………………………………………………………………. (5)
An awful missile fell on my garden
Ruined my white flowers, destroyed the beauty
Broke the green branches, it aims to sadden
Happy beings, really you're so potty
………………………………………………………………………. (6)
Under the debris, I found a soft rose
It was still dewy, It was still alive
My lass, I need you to revive and dose..
The rose, what a pity! the charm will rive
………………………………………………………………………. (7)
When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
………………………………………………………………………. (8)
i hope you enjoy reading my new poem
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i supposed that....read it again and show me my mistakes please
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