A ROSE & A HELL

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Mar 26, 2014 10:46 am

A ROSE & A HELL

Who listens to infants or cares for plants?
Who defends them, defends their sad mothers?
Who feels for them, feels for the tearful chants?
All denied, you have no friends, no brothers
………………………………………………………………………. (1)
Who will say " HAPPY RETURNS" again?
Who will give us cards and sweets at Bairam?
Who will wipe puzzled tears, and erase sore pain?
We all please the hope, cling to a fine tram
………………………………………………………………………. (2)
Clashes and shelling, are all day and night
Scattered limbs are spread so high in the sky
The mothers are still waiting for the knight
The saver will come and erase the sigh
………………………………………………………………………. (3)
Moving from place to place, I try to escape
During the night's silence, dull hours pass
And other foul bombs break the calm, and rape..
Our quiet, our souls, and kill the so fair lass
………………………………………………………………………. (4)
A grisly tyrant became our bad fate
Allied with Satan to kill more and more
He's thirsty to blood and he wants to sate
Who stops him? our happy life turned sore
………………………………………………………………………. (5)
An awful missile fell on my garden
Ruined my white flowers, destroyed the beauty
Broke the green branches, it aims to sadden
Happy beings, really you're so potty
………………………………………………………………………. (6)
Under the debris, I found a soft rose
It was still dewy, It was still alive
My lass, I need you to revive and dose..
The rose, what a pity! the charm will rive
………………………………………………………………………. (7)
When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
………………………………………………………………………. (8)

i hope you enjoy reading my new poem
have nice moments

Elisa · Post by **Elisa** » Thu Mar 27, 2014 3:42 pm

I am coming back from a very interesting travel through a troubled land and I have seen as a rose can grow among the ruins.
We don’t have to lose the hope. Very deep poem. Compliments!
I send to you my human friendly warmth.

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Mar 27, 2014 7:11 pm

hi
thanks 4 this warmth msg ...yes u caught the aim of this poem....that ; whatever happened there's still a hope ..here the rose represents the hope, the beauty & debris represents destroy, war, death
thnx 4 being the 1st one to comment on this poem and i hope u catch the mistakes of my poem
have nice moments

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Fri Mar 28, 2014 8:24 am

for me it's not ur best
i knw how u suffering i lived such situation before but u can draw this paint in better shape not as report

u tried to have little hope but i guess it's fake one but at least realistic one

don't be angry cuz i annoyed u but i feel little depressed nowadays

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Sat Mar 29, 2014 4:58 am

hi
thnx 4 ur comment and i'm not angry and u can speak what u like...but as u know there are two kinds of tales; descriptive and narrative....i tried here to convey my suffering through this poem and show to ppl what's going on in my province, in my town, in my place..
war means destroying, damage, death, deprivation...and unjust rulers, tyrant, who make this war. also i tried here that there is hope, beam in all conditions even in bad condition...there is still a hope and we must care for it to keep it safe...hope like a rose we've to treat, nurse it and care for it to keep it alive
i know it's not my best poem and i'm not angry and i thank u for ur comment
have nice moments
c u soon

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon Mar 31, 2014 8:22 am

dear dreamer
depression means that there're sth inside u, i know u have lots to show, u can write creative poetry koz of ur suffering....u r still waiting a miracle to happen...live ur life and try to write whatever come in ur mind...

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 03, 2014 3:31 am

Hello, non commented...hv nice moment

farah · Post by **farah** » Thu Apr 03, 2014 9:11 am

Hello shakespear
I think it is very lovely poem. It is descriptive poem. It shows events that happened in your country. It is considered as a document.
see you soom

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Fri Apr 04, 2014 9:43 pm

hi farah
thnx 4 this comment..sorry if i was late to reply u...yes u'r r8 it's considered as a document..also there's sth...i referred in it that we have to keep our hope and nurse it koz its like a white rose..
thnx again 4 the comment
c u

farah · Post by **farah** » Fri Apr 04, 2014 10:54 pm

hi Shakespear
you are welcome
really it is very good poem
don't care about comments that say it is not very good, i loved the last section

shakespear wrote:When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?

do not stop writing Shakespear
see you soon

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 09, 2014 11:40 am

hi friend
i also like the last stanza...it's about emotion...we can't live without emotion...
thnx 4 ur comment...i want to read sth from u..i think u r able to write a poem if u try...we can help each other...
thnx again

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 10, 2014 4:15 pm

i'm expecting better poem next time i mean that

you can start with this line

if i were you and u were me
waiting for ur line

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Sat Apr 12, 2014 12:22 pm

hello
ok ur line starts as the following:
if i were u and u were me
i use ur eyes, by my eyes u'll see
i touch ur chest feeling ur heart's beat
when i look to my face our eyes meet

complete plz...........................

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Sat Apr 12, 2014 2:27 pm

if i were u and u were me

u'll see how i feel
without u how can i feel
ur my half even if we won't meet

ur trun

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon Apr 14, 2014 10:55 am

If i were u and u were me
u would know and u would see
how pain'd hurt my soft soul
u will still my lofty goal
if i were u, i'd kiss my hand
if u were me, u'd get my land

ur turn

farah · Post by **farah** » Mon Apr 14, 2014 3:32 pm

Hi
you and Dreamrer will have a good porm, but:
Whose this poem will be? You or Dreamer?
No fight, ok?

:-P:-D
SEE YOU

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 5:26 am

if i were u and u were me
u would know how pain i could cause
so staying away is better for u

if i were u and u were me
u would know powerful i'm i
how i can break hearts easily with no lose ,,

if i were u and u were me
u'll see that staying away from u is mercy from me

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:10 am

Hi farah.
We won't argue about the poem
thnx 4 ur comment

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 7:59 pm

If I were you, and you were me
We'd live special life and we'd be
Happy creatures and we could see
Pretty sky and so pretty sea
........
If I were you, I'd nurse myself
That I still think by my real brain
I'd take me far from any elf
To my lover's chest, in a lane
..........
If you were me, you'd live torture
That I loved you or I loved me
I you, you me, we're sole creature
Am I your slave? Or we are free?
.........
If you were me, you'd have desire
You'd sense and feel my hot passion
You'd sense heat inside me and fire
If you were me, I'd get my ration
.........
ur turn

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 8:11 pm

if i were you and u were me
u'll feel what i live
heart says yes .. mind says no
if u were me u'll live in big trouble

if i were i would wake up
and have new love with new dream
no need to live past no need to cry
no need to wake past ..
let it pass

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 8:29 pm

hi
icant go on kox now my heart feels sad...y i feel ur tears rising in ur eyes, r they?
y i cause sadness 2 u & 2 myslf...u won in the poem....i wana u win....koz i u & u me , its mess

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 8:38 pm

it's not a battle to have winner in

i just wanna re-live my talent as we were remmber shaki?? those sweet mad days

sorry if i hurt u but as u said iu & u me

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 9:43 pm

Is it hard 2 find kind heart now a days? 4 me its not koz i hv my dearest & u kno that

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 10:33 pm

it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 10:42 pm

God granted me so sweet , educated ..sweets & that's enough.

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 10:45 pm

don't make her shy that little girl is vanishing

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:04 pm

If she vanishing, im vanishing 2.... U kno, she's full of sweets

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:06 pm

sweetness is'nt work nowaday the curle is winner at this time

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:22 pm

Sweets may be an adjective or a name, u got it?

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:26 pm

cu around busy man
and think of new line to start our game

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:31 pm

I use mobile with hacking so its weak...nothing make me busy on u

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:37 pm

u become hacker tooo!!!!!!!!!

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:44 pm

Just 2 get net...noth else

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 7:41 am

start with this word:
when....
when can my cheek lay on ur cheek?
when can my lips touch ur lips?
when can my hand confound in ur hair?
comb it and temper ur neck?
is it possible or it's no way?

ur turn

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 2:50 pm

when sun meet moon
when we meet
i'm in to u

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 4:32 pm

when can i meet u, and look into ur eyes?
when can i take u, and take u to my chest?
when can my chest touch urs? feel ur heat?
when my hopes come true and live in ur paradise?
million " when" but none can be fact...

ur turn

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 6:04 pm

when millions be true
when all starts be 4 u
when i can say i luv u?

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 6:31 pm

when will the bright star visit me?
when will my lover mercy my heart?
when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?

ur turn

farah · Post by **farah** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 9:25 pm

shakespear wrote:when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?

I like these two lines. What did you mean with these two lines??
Please check your inbox.
I am waiting.
Good night.

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 9:49 pm

mmm ok listen;
florid tree refers to fortile female, when delicious fruit refers to sin or refers to forbidden fruit of Adam in paradise...when he eats that fruit feels of his nakedness..i think u know the tale...
thnx 4 ur comment and i'll check my inbox..
gd nyt

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:30 am

when i be u
when smiles be true
and life combain us too

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:58 am

i think it's " combine" my teacher...don't worry i got it...
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?

good morning all my friends

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:41 pm

when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile

when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 8:42 pm

i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:06 pm

come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:18 pm

i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:31 pm

no more u win this time

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:43 pm

in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly

thnx

farah · Post by **farah** » Fri Apr 18, 2014 4:26 pm

Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

Thanks. I wait your coment.

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Sat Apr 19, 2014 12:51 pm

farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

hello farah:
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?

really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
have nice moments.

farah · Post by **farah** » Sun Apr 27, 2014 12:22 pm

hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:

you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...

i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon Apr 28, 2014 10:57 am

Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines

farah · Post by **farah** » Fri May 02, 2014 8:37 pm

shakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines

really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Fri May 02, 2014 9:04 pm

farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem

ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :
do i only feel sad ?
have nice moments...

farah · Post by **farah** » Fri May 02, 2014 9:43 pm

shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?

mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.

hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Sat May 03, 2014 2:33 pm

Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Mon May 05, 2014 8:19 am

if ur online just start ur lines

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon May 05, 2014 9:16 am

Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue May 06, 2014 11:55 am

i mean let's play our game

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue May 06, 2014 12:42 pm

Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Wed May 07, 2014 7:04 am

no wrods to say
no lyrics to sing

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed May 07, 2014 7:56 am

No words to say
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Wed May 07, 2014 10:20 am

no words to say
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

what do you think about

farah · Post by **farah** » Wed May 07, 2014 5:18 pm

Hello
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu May 08, 2014 7:13 am

dreamer wrote:no words to say
no games to play
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

hi farah:
did u mean these 2 lines?? ok may be u r r8 but the poet can do what others can't..this called in literature" poetic license" ...any way it's ur opinioin
but my opinion is: we have to write and write whatever comes to our mind...we have to translate our ideas to lines of poems...and show the other what we want to say in poetic writing...
dear friend dreamer:
i think u r able to write wtever u want...u can make all ur speech poetry... really i think u r the best in this club....koz u have soft sense
finally: thanks farah to show ur comment frankly
........... thanks dreamer to accept all opinion and comments
.......... thanks all my friends in this club to edure my long comments

all have nice moments.........warm kisses

farah · Post by **farah** » Thu May 08, 2014 9:25 pm

Waw.. How can this happen? If you agree I am not agree. But thank you to teach us the term(poetic licens) SHKIE... Have sweet dream my s......... FRIEND

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Fri May 09, 2014 7:58 am

well it's not a matter to agree or not it's just we post what's going in ur mind at this moment

u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah

cu around and waiting to share us in our game

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Fri May 09, 2014 5:32 pm

Hi farsh.. We all respect ur opinion but in return we wish others respect our opinions,
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day

farah · Post by **farah** » Mon May 12, 2014 10:45 am

Hi shakie... Thank you... I respect your opinion...bye my lovely friends

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Sun May 25, 2014 7:34 am

Hi farah.. Thnx
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...

Olagora · Post by **Olagora** » Thu Apr 09, 2015 5:42 am

it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Mon Jan 04, 2016 5:59 pm

Wooow still remmber ur role well let me think about something

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:03 pm

as u like but i like to hear and read from u new poem

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:06 pm

shakespear wrote:A ROSE & A HELL

Who listens to infants or cares for plants?
Who defends them, defends their sad mothers?
Who feels for them, feels for the tearful chants?
All denied, you have no friends, no brothers
………………………………………………………………………. (1)
Who will say " HAPPY RETURNS" again?
Who will give us cards and sweets at Bairam?
Who will wipe puzzled tears, and erase sore pain?
We all please the hope, cling to a fine tram
………………………………………………………………………. (2)
Clashes and shelling, are all day and night
Scattered limbs are spread so high in the sky
The mothers are still waiting for the knight
The saver will come and erase the sigh
………………………………………………………………………. (3)
Moving from place to place, I try to escape
During the night's silence, dull hours pass
And other foul bombs break the calm, and rape..
Our quiet, our souls, and kill the so fair lass
………………………………………………………………………. (4)
A grisly tyrant became our bad fate
Allied with Satan to kill more and more
He's thirsty to blood and he wants to sate
Who stops him? our happy life turned sore
………………………………………………………………………. (5)
An awful missile fell on my garden
Ruined my white flowers, destroyed the beauty
Broke the green branches, it aims to sadden
Happy beings, really you're so potty
………………………………………………………………………. (6)
Under the debris, I found a soft rose
It was still dewy, It was still alive
My lass, I need you to revive and dose..
The rose, what a pity! the charm will rive
………………………………………………………………………. (7)
When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
………………………………………………………………………. (8)

i hope you enjoy reading my new poem
have nice moments

what line u like in this poem????

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:26 pm

Whole stanza number 4

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:28 pm

koz it represents wt u lived in fact...r8???

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Mon Jan 04, 2016 6:31 pm

So right

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Jan 05, 2016 8:56 am

i supposed that....read it again and show me my mistakes please

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Fri Sep 15, 2017 8:58 am

RENEW OLD POEMS