I`m writing lyrics for a song. This is a fragment. Are there any mistakes (including style)
I was looking to the left, and why
When right was all I could see
Thank you !
Left and Right. Help
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Dalija
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Left and Right. Help
Hello,
I`m writing lyrics for a song. This is a fragment. Are there any mistakes (including style)
I was looking to the left, and why
When right was all I could see
Thank you !
I`m writing lyrics for a song. This is a fragment. Are there any mistakes (including style)
I was looking to the left, and why
When right was all I could see
Thank you !
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knowable
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Re: Left and Right. Help
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I was looking to the left but all I could see was (what was) on the right.
Why was I looking to the left when all I saw was on the right?
I was looking to the left but all I could see was (what was) on the right.
Why was I looking to the left when all I saw was on the right?