My second poem
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My second poem
Nice toilet
wow, toilet!
what a nice place you are!
where we can relax ourselves so much!
where we even can read some english novels,
where we can call our friends on phone,
where we can surf on internet with a laptop!
wow, once again,
Toilet, what a gorgeous place you are!
I love you!
wow, toilet!
what a nice place you are!
where we can relax ourselves so much!
where we even can read some english novels,
where we can call our friends on phone,
where we can surf on internet with a laptop!
wow, once again,
Toilet, what a gorgeous place you are!
I love you!
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Re: My second poem
RedRose wrote:Nice toilet
wow, toilet!
what a nice place you are!
where we can relax ourselves so much!
where we even can read some english novels,
where we can call our friends on phone,
where we can surf on internet with a laptop!
wow, once again,
Toilet, what a gorgeous place you are!
I love you!
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Yes, I haven't been on for a while now and I noticed that your English have yet to improve. You better keep practising or I will have no choice but to expel you.
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Redrose had painted a rose picture of the toilet. I borrowed the expression 'paint a rose picture of sth' from the two sentences below:
The article paints a bleak (= hopeless) picture of the future.
He painted a rosy (= happy) picture of family life.
From now on, I know 'rose' has another meaning: happy.
I love rose, especially a redrose!
The article paints a bleak (= hopeless) picture of the future.
He painted a rosy (= happy) picture of family life.
From now on, I know 'rose' has another meaning: happy.
I love rose, especially a redrose!
Noun by Noun, Verb by Verb: It is details that make writing interesting.
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hey, it's not that bad. i mean. what redrose posted is beautiful. i can see that you have high standards.Unknownsu wrote:Regardless of what you do or say, if I don't see any improvement, you're going to be expelled. I can't have a student like you destroy my reputation of being a competent teacher.
Word of advice: writing poems about toilets does not help your cause. LoL!
thank francine for your understanding.
but my teacher, unkownsu, so soon as I want to write a poem, I just recall nothing but toilet! I don't know why I always remember toilet!
But teacher, you see, my poem about toilet is so popular. that means, under your guidance, I am becoming a nice student.
and teacher, next time, maybe I can write a poem about ~ or constipation instead?
but my teacher, unkownsu, so soon as I want to write a poem, I just recall nothing but toilet! I don't know why I always remember toilet!
But teacher, you see, my poem about toilet is so popular. that means, under your guidance, I am becoming a nice student.
and teacher, next time, maybe I can write a poem about ~ or constipation instead?
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Sweet teacher, I always practice my english with diligent. Coz I always worry that my bad english might ruin the fine reputation of my teacher. so, I learn English day and night!Unknownsu wrote: Redrose, if you compose a poem about ~ or constipation, you better at least make it a half decent one this time!
And I will take your order to post a decent poem about ~ or constipation here. If my next poem is nice, just let me know, ok?
Teacher, I had never thought that my poem about toilet would be so popular! now I know people all like my toilet poem, and I know that I am winning honour for my teacher!
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thanks sweet!francine wrote:yeah, i agree. i love that toilet poem as well. i admire redrose of posting such poem like that. it simply means that she can write a poem about everything or anything under the sun. unlike others who can only write a poem about one topic. i can say, that she's pretty talented!
Due to you guys' nice compliments, another nice poem is brewing in my mind, it is about constipation. and I guess I will talk about the constipation in detail
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