Persian Rose In Italy
Rose Persian, I see in my dreams
Dwells in Italy, in that far place
So nice, so cute and always beams..
With beauty, hope, and moony face
I spent my life search and seek
I've just found and followed the trace
I won't stop even if I feel weak
Oh rose! You're my life, my last wish
You're my heaven, my high ideal peak
Don't leave me, it'll be my finish
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I love you , can't you get this fact?
"You waste our time" many times, I said
You always blame for my past act
And mourn our love as mourn the dead
Our love-days pass like dust in wind
You’re my roe, in my heart you bed
I loved you, pleased you, but you dinned..
"you don't love me, you love many"
You accused me, wronged me, you sinned
I'm yours and you're mine.. oh honey
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Take me with you, you took my heart
It beat inside me with your name
Now it's with you, we are apart
But you still lament and still blame
You can please me, you are so smart
I don’t deserve you, its a shame
You're truthful, so cute and so bright
But I'm liar, unclear with my dame
You're my eyes, hands, sweet dreams in night
Blame me if this will give me fame
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All I have said is for your sake
And your name's written by my blood
Trust me ! my poem is not a fake
Words flow from my chest like a flood
I saw your face, I became mad
You're still so fresh like a bloom bud
So don’t leave me, don’t make me sad
Your love erased all the past deeds
I know you are good and I'm bad
But you always grant my needs
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy
hello or goodmorning
woooooow new poem in short time ,you are so g enerous for us (readers) thanx for that freind
now let's come to ur poem as usual it's about theme of love of course with new symbol which is rose this time .By the way i do not agree with ur choice of this symbol (rose) because roses are so soft so weak live only for too short time then wilt . i agree that roses enjoy us since birth to die of it with view ..smell and touch but LOVE should be more srtong than rose it should be like (diamond)
bright ..soft ..strong and last forever
so when u like ur lover with a rose for me ur telling her: i love u but by the end u'll vanish how long i look for you ..how long i wait for you but at last u'll vanish and go and u support that idea with
You're my heaven, my high ideal peak
wht means of ur ideal peak if this peak is going to disappear this means that you spend your life searching for nothing..........................
no grammatical mistakes of course ..strong touchable words ...maybe i become so hostile forgive me for that
thanx for entertaining us again
woooooow new poem in short time ,you are so g enerous for us (readers) thanx for that freind
now let's come to ur poem as usual it's about theme of love of course with new symbol which is rose this time .By the way i do not agree with ur choice of this symbol (rose) because roses are so soft so weak live only for too short time then wilt . i agree that roses enjoy us since birth to die of it with view ..smell and touch but LOVE should be more srtong than rose it should be like (diamond)
bright ..soft ..strong and last forever
so when u like ur lover with a rose for me ur telling her: i love u but by the end u'll vanish how long i look for you ..how long i wait for you but at last u'll vanish and go and u support that idea with
You're my heaven, my high ideal peak
wht means of ur ideal peak if this peak is going to disappear this means that you spend your life searching for nothing..........................
no grammatical mistakes of course ..strong touchable words ...maybe i become so hostile forgive me for that
thanx for entertaining us again
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy
Waw! You are a true Don Giovanni
You have lovers all around the world!!!!
You have lovers all around the world!!!!
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy
shakespear wrote: All I have said is for your sake
And your name's written by my blood
Trust me ! my poem is not a fake
Words flow from my chest like a flood
I saw your face, I became mad
You're still so fresh like a bloom bud
So don’t leave me, don’t make me sad
Your love erased all the past deeds
I know you are good and I'm bad
But you always grant my needs
Hello Shakes, what a nice poem :) ....well in this poem you compare a woman with a flower/rose, especially when you talk about youth; although she may not be young, she can reflect youth, i think that's why you said "You're still so fresh like a bloom bud"
Wonderful Poem cu!!!
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hello sweets
you said that the rose or flower have short life and even is this happened but its symbol stays in our mind so if it vanish it'll be kept in our mind as beautiful...as nice perfume, scent....read this line
any way u made lovely analyses to my poem and i really thankful to u lovely comment...u r able to make lovely assays by analyses different topics
hello elisa
hello lara
thnx for ur comments and i have lots of speech i wana say but i hate to talk lots ...
i hope i can make another comments later
thnx again
have nice moments
you said that the rose or flower have short life and even is this happened but its symbol stays in our mind so if it vanish it'll be kept in our mind as beautiful...as nice perfume, scent....read this line
i think u got the aim nowshakespear wrote:You're still so fresh like a bloom bud
any way u made lovely analyses to my poem and i really thankful to u lovely comment...u r able to make lovely assays by analyses different topics
hello elisa
listen all persons in the world can be our personalities in our poems...they r symbols like flowers and roses and places and historical figures...so we can make use of all we can meet or read or see in our life..Elisa wrote:Waw! You are a true Don Giovanni
hello lara
i think u hit the target by ur comment and guess what i meant koz always flowers and roses reflect youth and beauty so u could hit the target and guess the intention behind the the lines...Lara wrote:she can reflect youth, i think that's why you said "You're still so fresh like a bloom bud"
thnx for ur comments and i have lots of speech i wana say but i hate to talk lots ...
i hope i can make another comments later
thnx again
have nice moments
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy
It is not important who you are...
you don't even know
Don't be presumptuous
how can you think to know what other people want, feel or look like?
Take what you need and let other doing the same!
We are ONE, NO ONE AND ONE HUNDRED THOUSAND
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/One,_No_on ... d_Thousand
you don't even know
Don't be presumptuous
how can you think to know what other people want, feel or look like?
Take what you need and let other doing the same!
We are ONE, NO ONE AND ONE HUNDRED THOUSAND
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/One,_No_on ... d_Thousand
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Elisa wrote:It is not important who you are...
you don't even know
Don't be presumptuous
how can you think to know what other people want, feel or look like?
Take what you need and let other doing the same!
We are ONE, NO ONE AND ONE HUNDRED THOUSAND
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/One,_No_on ... d_Thousand
nice quotaion Elisa but i do not think undersatand the purpose of putting it here as a reply for the poem ??????????????????
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hi allsweets wrote:nice quotaion Elisa but i do not think undersatand the purpose of putting it here as a reply for the poem ??????????????????
thnx alisa but really i agree with sweets in her reply
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Thanks frieends
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hi elisa
wt u meant by ur quotation?
plz show us ur point of view...
have nice moments
wt u meant by ur quotation?
plz show us ur point of view...
have nice moments
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy
Shak, you are really funny!!!
Anyway I think this is one of your best poems.
I like it so much and I wish to write one but I am not as inspired as you are.
I hope you will soon read my "opera".
For the moment I can only send to you a strong hug ;)
Anyway I think this is one of your best poems.
I like it so much and I wish to write one but I am not as inspired as you are.
I hope you will soon read my "opera".
For the moment I can only send to you a strong hug ;)
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hi
thnx and i'll read ur topic" opera"
i hope u have inspiration
have lovely days
thnx and i'll read ur topic" opera"
i hope u have inspiration
have lovely days
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hi elisa
i searched on ur topic ' opera' but i ddnt find it
plz send me link to write and comment...
thnx
i searched on ur topic ' opera' but i ddnt find it
plz send me link to write and comment...
thnx
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy
Shak, you cannot find my "Opera" because it is still in my mind :)
My English is so bad that you cannot understand me when I write.
"I hope you will soon read my "opera"." I wanted to say that I hope to be able, soon, to write something.
At the moment I have not much time and you know we need quiet to write.
Have lovely days you, too
My English is so bad that you cannot understand me when I write.
"I hope you will soon read my "opera"." I wanted to say that I hope to be able, soon, to write something.
At the moment I have not much time and you know we need quiet to write.
Have lovely days you, too
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hi lara
u r welcome and i hope read sth new by u
i'll be waiting for that
have nice moments
u r welcome and i hope read sth new by u
i'll be waiting for that
have nice moments
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yes of course soon u will read my new poem
nice moments for u too c u
nice moments for u too c u
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sorry i thought u meant that i'll find ur poem and read it...any way i'm waiting it....Elisa wrote:Shak, you cannot find my "Opera" because it is still in my mind :)
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy
Fragrant and beautiful roses 。。。But she captured the hearts of many men who are willing to moths...........
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wendywenyuan wrote:Fragrant and beautiful roses 。。。But she captured the hearts of many men who are willing to moths...........
hi and thnx for this comment..but i ddn't understand it well..u can say butterflies instead of moths..any way thnx again
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